Talk:Rockaway Beach and Boardwalk/GA1
GA Review[edit]
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Reviewer: Kncny11 (talk · contribs) 18:24, 8 June 2021 (UTC)
Putting here as a placeholder – I will get to this in a day or two. Kncny11 (shoot) 18:24, 8 June 2021 (UTC)
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Infobox and lede[edit]
- "several unconnected sections" → "several disconnected sections"
- Done.
- In the infobox, the area is listed as 170 acres, which seems to just include the beach, if the boardwalk is really adjacent
- NYC Parks characterizes the beach and boardwalk as a piece of parkland with area, rather than as just a linear feature. Sometimes this can result in unusual situations like a parkway, or even a road median, containing several acres of area. Epicgenius (talk) 19:00, 15 June 2021 (UTC)
Description[edit]
- WL The New York Times
- Done.
Boardwalk[edit]
- The quote in the first sentence, out of context, feels off; I'd either remove it and link to the types of woods, or attribute it to a source
- Done.
Beach[edit]
- Pipe "current" to ocean current
- Done.
Park facilities[edit]
- WL roller hockey and remove hyphen
- Done.
- A seal sculpture, also from Central Park, is also located on the boardwalk. The repetition of "also" here feels awkward
- Reworded.
- Remove parentheses in the last sentence and change to comma, for flow
- Done.
Predecessors[edit]
- "unconnected sections" → "disconnected sections"
- Done.
- In the second paragraph, you list "family houses, a hotel, and an 800-seat theater" but then use the singular "it" (which, now that I read it, could be referring to the boardwalk itself, but is still a bit confusing)
- Reworded.
- "in a 1892 fire" → "in an 1892 fire"
- Done.
Expanded beach and boardwalk[edit]
Planning and first section[edit]
- three options: a boardwalk without a road, as well as one with a narrow parkway and one with a narrow parkway just to make the three options immediately clear
- I rephrased it. The three options were those without a road, with a narrow parkway, and with a wide parkway. Epicgenius (talk) 19:00, 15 June 2021 (UTC)
Connections between sections[edit]
- "just as work on the second section
of the boardwalkbetween Beach 75th and 56th Streets was to commence"- Done.
- "since they had paid taxes for the boardwalk" → "since they had paid taxes for it"
- Done.
Modifications[edit]
1930s through 1950s[edit]
- Good
1970s through 2000s[edit]
- in the late 1960s or early 1970s Is there a reason for the ambiguity of the dates?
- This is because, at the time of the source article's publication, the repairs were made a few years ago, but the article does not specify. Epicgenius (talk) 19:00, 15 June 2021 (UTC)
- I don't think a wild dog attack qualifies as a crime
- I changed to "dangerous incidents". Epicgenius (talk) 19:00, 15 June 2021 (UTC)
- WL the first instance of New York Daily News
- Done.
21st century reconstruction[edit]
- Can you elaborate on the damage during Hurricane Irene?
- Done.
Cultural impact[edit]
- Pipe "single" to Single (music)
- Done.
- Change formatting of Billboard Hot 100 to Billboard Hot 100
- Done.
- "sponsored by the Queens Economic Development Corporation"
- Done.
References[edit]
- No surprise, generally looks fine
- The New York Post is generally unreliable (although more reliable for local news & sports), so if another source exists and that one isn't needed, I'd switch it out
- Done.
General comments[edit]
- Stability looks good
- Pictures all look good
- Earwig turns up clean at 8.3%
- @Kncny11: Thanks for the review. I've addressed all the issues now. Epicgenius (talk) 19:00, 15 June 2021 (UTC)
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.