Talk:Royce White

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Former good articleRoyce White was one of the Sports and recreation good articles, but it has been removed from the list. There are suggestions below for improving the article to meet the good article criteria. Once these issues have been addressed, the article can be renominated. Editors may also seek a reassessment of the decision if they believe there was a mistake.
Article milestones
DateProcessResult
December 26, 2011Good article nomineeListed
July 17, 2022Good article reassessmentDelisted
Did You Know
A fact from this article appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the "Did you know?" column on December 13, 2011.
The text of the entry was: Did you know ... that during Royce White's two-and-a-half-year hiatus from competitive basketball, he spent time on his music career and learned how to play the piano?
Current status: Delisted good article

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: JDOG555 (talk · contribs) 21:06, 25 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I will be starting the review shorty JDOG555 (talk) 21:06, 25 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Quick Comments[edit]

Just some quick comments, the repitive use of "he" is annoying  Done. I noticed some of your sentences are a couple words long and start with "he". The personal life section needs to be expanded. I'll give a full list of comments later JDOG555 (talk) 21:31, 25 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I have replaced a bunch of the "he"s.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 22:14, 25 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Review[edit]

Okay here is my review, if I am off-base on any of these please tell me.

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

Lead[edit]

Disregard
The lead for this article is good only 2 things I would consider changing or removing Lead seems pretty good, can't seem anything wrong with it
Disregard
  • "He has endured disciplinary issues that have necessitated transfers in both high school and college."
    Is this neccessary? Sounds kinda uneeded to me.
Unless you think it is misleading or POV it should remain, IMO. So much of the text describes the issues at Minnesota, that I can't see how you could summarize the article and not include at least that.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 01:22, 26 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
 Works for me JDOG555 (talk) 01:42, 26 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Disregard
  • "His success at the college and professional level is highly anticipated."
    I would suggest removing this statement, too bias.
This is also a summary of points in the text: 1.) expected NBA first rounder 2.) Big 12 Preseason Newcomeer of the Year. Considering the specific prose it is summarizing, is it still biased?--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 01:25, 26 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
 Works for me JDOG555 (talk) 01:42, 26 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox[edit]

High school[edit]

  • First line "Born in Minneapolis," expand to something like "Born in Minneapolis, White went to DeLaSalle High School for his freshman to junior years. For his senior year, White went to Hopkins High School.  Done
  • He had dozens of collegiate scholarship → He had dozens of collegiate scholarship offers.  Done
  • "During that season White beefed up his weight from approximately 210 pounds (95.3 kg) to about 225 pounds (102.1 kg)."

Is this really needed, I would get remove of it

  • I just can't see how it is really relevant, if you decide to keep it I would suggest changing the wording for "beefed up" JDOG555 (talk) 02:12, 26 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

College[edit]

  • "White was initially a suspect in a November incident"

What was the incident?

Disregard
  • "During his time away from basketball, he learned to play the piano."
    Is this relevant or needed?
  • Most sports bios are considered devoid of non-sports content. This helps us round out his personality for the reader.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 01:50, 26 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Change Because Whtie → Because White  Done
  • Rewrite "He transferred to Iowa State prior to using any of his athletic eligibility at Minnesota and applied to the NCAA for a waiver to be eligible to play during the 2010–11 NCAA Division I men's basketball season. The NCAA denied his waiver." to something like "He transferred to Iowa State prior to using any of his athletic eligibility at Minnesota and applied to the NCAA for a waiver to be eligible to play during the 2010–11 NCAA Division I men's basketball season, but his waiver was denied."
Disregard
  • Move the reference for "Iowa State appealed the decision" at the end of the sentence
    • It belongs where it is. Refs preferably follow punctuation marks, not necessarily at the end of sentences. This is a ref for the first half of the sentence.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 01:53, 26 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Personal[edit]

  • Consider expanding a bit more if possible.
    • I got nothing unless you want the piano/music career stuff here.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 01:57, 26 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
      • Well it said "While suspended from the team, he spent some of his extracurricular time on his music career." Add some details about his musical career maybe JDOG555 (talk) 02:14, 26 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "His grandfather, who won a national intramural basketball championship, attended University of Minnesota with Winfield."

Who is his grandfather?

References[edit]

Disregard
  • Alot of your references are after a comma, try moving some of them to the end of a sentence.
  • I noticed alot of your references are from the statribune by the same author can you find references from other websites?

Images[edit]

--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 02:16, 26 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

GA PASS[edit]

Congratulations all of my issues have been addressed, your article is now a Good Article! JDOG555 (talk) 04:22, 26 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

chronology[edit]

Does chronology place undue weight on his anxiety situation?--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 23:00, 20 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]

More or better pictures of White[edit]

I went through the set vs. Iowa some time ago.

If anyone is looking for more or better pictures of White from college, feel free to thumb through the following:

vs Baylor
vs Texas Tech
vs Texas A&M
vs Kansas State
vs Oklahoma State
vs Texas

I believe those were all home games. There are other sets against non-power conferences. Maybe some of those guys will be pro players in the future.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 15:26, 29 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Would anyone like to offer feedback on the following prospective images:
Driving on Quincy Acy: http://www.flickr.com/photos/goiowastate/6957967159/in/photostream
Attacking Perry Jones III: http://www.flickr.com/photos/goiowastate/6957970729/in/set-72157629523255749
Defending Perry Jones III: http://www.flickr.com/photos/goiowastate/6957966459/in/set-72157629523255749
Short hair iso: http://www.flickr.com/photos/goiowastate/6811854984/in/set-72157629523255749
Short hair 2: http://www.flickr.com/photos/goiowastate/6957955473/in/set-72157629523255749

Page as a whole[edit]

This article seems to have way too many details about his career in comparison to players with similar careers (decent college players, insignificant NBA career)...the daily updates/articles about his NBA status, extremely high number of pictures of his 1 season in college...

Seems like this page needs to be edited to a much, much more concise version where you don't have to read about every college game and every article written about his NBA career. — Preceding unsigned comment added by TallKidIsTall (talk • contribs) 03:26, 5 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Agreed. I just did a major overhaul to make it more concise and readable. I have no idea how this was ever listed as a good article. It's not even a good article now with all the changes I made; it was nowhere close to being a good article before. MonMothma (talk) 21:26, 5 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Royce White NBL Canada MVP detail[edit]

Can anyone help me find the announcement that Royce White was named NBL Canada MVP. I want to see the vote and who the other contenders were.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:43, 1 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

  • TonyTheTiger I can't find information on who the other contenders are. I assume they are the other members of the all-league team but that info isn't public either. I haven't seen the NBL Canada release that info in past seasons until after the postseason. The league made the announcement on this page . TempleM (talk) 00:44, 2 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

NPOV dispute[edit]

Parts of this article appear to have either been written by the subject or his publicist.

The opening description of him as a "humanitarian" and a "creator" are not objective terms.

The final paragraph of the opening section "White frequently challenges the fundamentals of capitalism and corporate culture and how the two are a major roadblock to achieving a better social equity and quality. White claims a business style of social entrepreneurship. A concept that is becoming very popular amongst millennial entrepreneurs.[4]" are not objective and clearly meant to be complimentary.

This article has also had negative comments and depictions of him and his behavior removed from the article. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Golotaguy (talk • contribs) 18:43, 2 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

There have been versions of this article that have had questionable content, but I have reverted a few changes that I do not feel misrepresent the subject.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 13:47, 26 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]
@Golotaguy and TonyTheTiger: Is this resolved? Can we remove the tag? AIRcorn (talk) 01:29, 4 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]
The article is stable, I guess.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 00:25, 10 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Wrong Statistics[edit]

Fix the statistics, they're wrong.

2020 Sports Illustrated article[edit]

I've updated and incorporated some of the material from this SI article into White's page; namely, his training and plans to have his first MMA fight this year, and a quote from an unnamed NBA GM describing him as a "Curt Flood-type" figure for his efforts to bring more attention to mental health in the sport. White is still primarily notable for his tenure in the NBA, so it would be premature to identify him as an MMA fighter until he's begun to participate in matches. OhNoitsJamie Talk 20:00, 14 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

GA Reassessment[edit]

Royce White[edit]

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Result: Delist, as the article has not been kept up to date + there are NPOV concerns. Femke (talk) 17:05, 17 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]

The article is woefully outdated. It does not include enough details about White's recent political activities, public statements, or his recently announced campaign for congress (MN-05). Also, as others have pointed out on the talk page, negative edits tend be removed quickly (possibly by a PR team?). It no longer meets the criteria for a good article. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Minneapples (talk • contribs) 17:15, 22 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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