Talk:Sakura (Tsubasa: Reservoir Chronicle)/GA1
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Reviewer: Johanna (talk · contribs) 19:42, 7 September 2015 (UTC)
Second on my "to review" list. Johanna (formerly BenLinus1214)talk to me!see my work 19:42, 7 September 2015 (UTC)
- Thanks. I'll give my best.Tintor2 (talk) 22:39, 7 September 2015 (UTC)
Comments
- Infobox and Lead
- Instead of putting her two appearances on different lines, put "Tsubasa: Reservoir Chronicle and xxxHolic character" as it is in the article Frasier Crane, Addison Montgomery, and other characters who appear in multiple series.
- Be sure the lead follows the structure of the article (i.e. earlier sections come first in the lead). If you find that that doesn't make sense, change the section layout instead.
- Are there two characters named Sayoran in two different mangas? If so, specify this.
- Creation and conception
- "the characters of Osamu Tezuka" upon first reading, it appears that Osamu Tezuka is a character to those of us who don't know any better. :) I would replace it with "the characters created by Osamu Tezuka"
- Also, how are they similar to each other? Is this sourced?
- What's an OVA?
- "Makino pointed…" Do you mean "pointed out"?
- Character outline
- Why exactly are the chapter titles in French?
- Just a question: why is there a big jump in references between chapters 32 and 145?
- How did Fei-Wang die exactly?
- Does the anime series make any changes to her storyline?
- Reception
- It should probably be "popular among readers" not "within"
- Who was she second to in the first poll? In the second poll, what rank was she and who was she behind?
- I might place this rankings stuff at the end of the section, as this is more typical.
- "Megan Lavey initially called" Could you elaborate a bit on her opinions? It's a bit unclear what she was getting at right now.
- References
- Refs 44 and 50 are dead.
@Tintor2: Nice article and nice writing! I was expecting to have a lot of comments on the plot summary, but it was quite well written! Clear this up and you'll be set to go. :) Johanna (formerly BenLinus1214)talk to me!see my work 02:49, 10 September 2015 (UTC)
I've done some work and:
- I moved the creation section per WP:Lead.
- Is it okay to write "pointed out."? I mean it's a phrasal verb.
- I would add the original Syaoran in the lead but the character is introduced in the second half of the series.
- Found an archive ref 50. I don't know which one is ref 44 after moving the article's lead.
- The anime doesn't go anywhere and is followed by the original video animations
- The manga in both Japanese and English uses the word Chapitre.
@BenLinus1214: Tintor2 (talk) 14:59, 10 September 2015 (UTC)
- @Tintor2: The old ref 44 is now ref 56 (animage). Other than that, I can definitely pass. Johanna (formerly BenLinus1214)talk to me!see my work 16:25, 10 September 2015 (UTC)
- Never mind, I found an archive-url quickly. Pass. Johanna (formerly BenLinus1214)talk to me!see my work 16:28, 10 September 2015 (UTC)
- GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section):
b (citations to reliable sources):
c (OR):
- a (reference section):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects):
b (focused):
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):
b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
- Thanks.Tintor2 (talk) 16:28, 10 September 2015 (UTC)