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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 06:51, 10 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]


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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

I will review this short article today; it is appropriately the GAN before mine in the queue! --K. Peake 06:51, 10 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for your review, again! Really appreciate the comments. I have addressed them all now. Let me know if there's anything else to do. Unexpectedlydian♯4talk‽ 15:01, 12 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

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  • Link anything significant in the infobox like you have elsewhere, e.g. Dmitri Shostakovich
    •  Done
  • Introduce who Dmitri Shostakovich is
    •  Done
  • Pipe Petrograd Conservatory to Saint Petersburg Conservatory
    •  Done
  • "It is one of" → "The composition is one of"
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  • "It was premiered in" → "The composition was premiered in"
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  • After the above sentence, add one about the themes of this composition, followed by a critical reception sentence; split into two paras if enough sentences
    •  Done
  • Wikilink F-sharp minor
    •  Done

Background

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  • Wikilink F-sharp minor
    •  Done
  • "during the autumn of early winter months" I don't think this actually makes sense
    • Should be "or", have changed.  Done
  • "the composers' first year at" → "the composer's first year at"
    •  Done
  • Pipe Petrograd Conservatory to Saint Petersburg Conservatory
    •  Done
  • "Shostakovich was almost fifteen." → "Shostakovich was almost 15." per MOS:NUM
    • Also changed thirteen to 13.  Done
  • Shouldn't you write "this generally remains" since the date has been disputed as you've cited here?
    •  Done
  • Wikilink B minor
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  • "composition teacher, Maximilian Steinberg, who had taught Shostakovich" → "composition teacher Maximilian Steinberg, who had taught him"
    •  Done
  • The last para can be moved to the end of the critical assessment section, which can be also a legacy one as I will later explain
    •  Done

Form

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  • Pipe Tchaikovsky to Pyotr Ilyich Tchaikovsky
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  • See MOS:NUM for the correct formatting of the numbers of the instruments
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  • "reminiscent of Maximillian Steinberg." → "reminiscent of Steinberg."
    •  Done
  • Wikilink D major
    •  Done

Critical assessment

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  • Retitle to Reception and legacy
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  • Add a comma after Nikolai Malko
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  • Mention the year of Symphony No. 1
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  • Pipe ballet to Ballet (music)
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  • Remove wikilink on Tchaikovsky
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  • Pipe Delibes to Léo Delibes
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  • Remove comma before Children's Notebook
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  • "to the composer: Gillies" → "to the composer; Gillies"
    •  Done

References

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Citations

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  • Copyvio score looks phenomenal at 5.7%!!!!
  • Ref 11 does not lead to any work, so fix it
    • Link didn't work due to a typo, have fixed now.  Done

Works cited

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Final comments and verdict

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