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GA Review[edit]

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Hi all, I will be reviewing this article. Ping me for any questions. --Legolas (talk2me) 09:05, 9 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for criteria)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS):
    Extremely poor prose. see my points below.
  • Fixed everything except point no. 6 in the background section due to that it is not a line. -- Ipodnano05 (talk) 23:33, 24 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  1. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
    reference 3, no caps in the title. Other references need both work and publisher criterias.
  1. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
    Tends to go towards a little bit of fancruft regarding Cyrus and the others solo singles.
  1. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  2. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  3. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
    File:Senditonmusicvideo.jpg fails WP:NFCC#3b. Lower the resolution.
  1. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:
    On hold for seven days. If issues are addressed then I'll pass the article. If not, its a fail. --Legolas (talk2me) 05:58, 23 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]
    Passed. Congrats. --Legolas (talk2me) 05:12, 29 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Prose correction[edit]

;lead

  1. On August 11, 2009 in the United States, the song was released --> The song was released on August 11, 2009 in the United States
  2. who have previously written for Cyrus in "Hoedown Throwdown --> who have previously written the song "Hoedown Throwdown" for Cyrus
  3. Among many of the inspirations from the six artists were that the song sends a great message and that it is important to be environmentally-friendly. --> Doesnot make sense. Please rephrase.
  4. on a "green-message." --> wrong punctuations for quotations, should be inside the dot.
  5. Even the song only received airplay on Radio Disney, it achieved commercial success by debuting at number twenty on the Billboard Hot 100 the same week as other songs by Cyrus, Lovato and Gomez. --> The song only received airplay on Radio Disney and debuted at number twenty on the Billboard Hot 100. --> remove all fancruft.
  6. The corresponding music video --> No need for separate para. Join with the previous one.
background
  1. The song was written by Adam Anders and Nikki Hassman in collaboration with Peter Astrom, the first two who wrote Cyrus' hit "Hoedown Throwdown." --> The song was written by Adam Anders, Nikki Hassman and Peter Astrom --> People who wrote "Hoedown Throwdown" seems a case of WP:UNDUE.
  2. Change on an interview --> in an interview
  3. way is possible --> remove is
  4. The middle Jonas ???
  5. Cyrus mentioned that her favorite part to record was the line "One spark starts a fire." Cyrus said she "loves" this line because it is true and that if children send on the message, everyone will know. --> make it past tense
  6. Another part she believes is very inspirational is that they are "encouraging kids to do it. --> Another line she believed to be inspirational was, "encouraging kids to do it.
  7. The eldest of the brothers  ????
  8. The youngest Jonas said that????
reception
  1. Disney's take "We are the World" --> Disney's take on "We are the World"
  2. and song's lyrics as ineffective --> and the song's lyrics as ineffective
chart performance
  1. Issue dated September 5, it descended one spot to number twenty-one and then forty-three. --> WP:FANCRUFT. There's no point for lines like this.
tracklisting
  1. Make a single column. Not that big to use {{col-2}}
charts and peaks
  1. remove section. A single chart is not needed to be separately listed in a table.
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