Talk:Shadow Hearts/GA1
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Reviewer: Alexandra IDV (talk · contribs) 09:40, 29 August 2021 (UTC)
Will return with a review within the next few days.--AlexandraIDV 09:40, 29 August 2021 (UTC)
Infobox
- I don't think "with variations" is necessary in the caption - the fact that they're called "similar" already implies there's some variation between them
- I don't see this as a major thing, but I would recommend adding sources for the release dates in the infobox since they're not mentioned anywhere in this article. Presumably Famitsu's database is an easy-to-find source for them.
Lead
- If Koudelka considered part of the SH series? If so,
For the first game in the series, see Shadow Hearts (video game).
should be reworded - Simliarly,
consisting of a trilogy of titles for the PlayStation 2 (PS2) and its predecessor Koudelka for the PlayStation.
should say "and their predecessor" if we're saying Koudelka is the predecessor of the PS2 games and not of the entire franchise
Titles
- Looks good
Gameplay
- Unsure about sanity points and judgment rings being capitalized like that
- "independantly" is spelled with an E, not an A
Setting and characters
- Mangaka is jargon in English that we can't expect the average reader to understand - I would rewrite it as "manga creator" and link manga
a time chosen as a turning point between an area of superstition
- this should say "a period of...", right?Shadow Hearts, which takes place during the years 1913 and 1914,
- it is clear that they are years. I would rewrite this as "...which takes place in 1913–1914"
Production
- Why the quotation marks around
horror RPG
? - Do we know why Matsuzo Machida was credited as Itakura?
- Would recommend writing out IP in full as intellectual property, and probably linking it
Reception
- Looks good
Legacy
- Looks good
References
- Looks good
Things not strictly part of GA
- Adding alt text to the images would help make the article more accessible to readers with impaired vision
- I would recommend rewording either paragraph 2 or 3 in the lead, so that you don't start two paragraphs in succession with "The series"
I only had a few comments to leave on this one, and they seem pretty easy to address. I will put this on hold for the usual seven days - ping me when you have addressed them or if you have any questions.--AlexandraIDV 06:08, 31 August 2021 (UTC)
- @Alexandra IDV: I've addressed everything you praised, bar two things. First, all I've found is that the "Machida" title is a pseudonym but also the most common name and nothing's been said beyond that. As to the capitalization of Judgement Ring, that's its most common form both in-game (where it's a side quest character of sorts) and in articles describing the series. --ProtoDrake (talk) 09:22, 31 August 2021 (UTC)