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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by BorgQueen (talk09:35, 3 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Created by CeeGee (talk). Self-nominated at 09:03, 11 March 2023 (UTC). Post-promotion hook changes for this nom will be logged at Template talk:Did you know nominations/Sibil Pektorosoğlu; consider watching this nomination, if it is successful, until the hook appears on the Main Page.[reply]

  • New, long enough, generally well-written (though one can sense through the sentence structure that the article was written by a native speaker of Turkish; I would advise fusing some of the phrases and varying the subject between "She" and "Pektorosoğlu", but this is not an absolute requirement); no plagiarism, image seems properly credited and licensed. Two concerns remain: (1) the lead does not summarize the article, and includes some banal facts about her that are superfluously referenced (the fact that she sings in Armenian is/would have to be in any case covered in the body of text) -- please consider expanding with more bio facts about her and removing the superfluous references from that portion; (2) the hook, while not uninteresting, is based on a primary source -- this would not necessarily be an issue, however it appears to be an issue here, because of the "Jesus Christ's spoken language" thing. Does she make a special issue of her singing in Christ's language? If so, then the hook would be reworded to something more relevant to her situation: "she sings in Aramaic, which she calls 'the language of Christ'", or something of that nature. This seems not to be the case, and the primary source simply informs Turkish readers, along the lines of "you might not know of this language, but it was spoken by Jesus" -- the sort of statement we would not base hooks on (like saying "she occasionally sings in Romanian, which is the language of Dracula"); in any case, we would not credit info about what language Christ spoke to promotional sites. To avoid this, I would advise that another info from the article is picked as the hook. Regards, Dahn (talk) 06:53, 14 March 2023 (UTC)[reply]
  • @Dahn: Thank you very much for your detailed review. (1) I don't know what is missing in the lead and which facts are banal and superfluously referenced. "Her songs in Armenian language" is mentioned in the text with reference. What kind of more facts about her bio is required? Which "superfluous references" in which "portion" I have to remove? Sorry, I really couldn't understand. Please give specific details for me. (2) Below, I offer an ALT-hook as requested:
@CeeGee: Please see Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Lead section#Citations as to what I mean by the facts being superfluously cited (for instance, her singing in Armenian is not "likely to be challenged", precisely because it is a basic fact about her, and well referenced in the body of text). You might also consider expanding the lead to be a summary of her life and career, for instance that she is a lyric soprano, that she began singing in a church, or that she visited the Ani ruins. The lead is supposed to be an overview of facts referenced and discussed in more detail in the text after it.
That said, the new hook is AGF verified. Dahn (talk) 10:55, 14 March 2023 (UTC)[reply]