Talk:Skirmish at Top Malo House/GA1
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Reviewer: Kges1901 (talk · contribs) 16:46, 30 June 2022 (UTC)
Will take this one at some point in the next few days. Kges1901 (talk) 16:46, 30 June 2022 (UTC)
- Lead does not explain what Operation Corporate was, summarize the action itself or explain why Top Malo House was of significance
- a patrol formed from staff and trainees of the British Mountain and Arctic Warfare Cadre, a training detachment of the Royal Marines who were under the Control of 3 Commando Brigade - Could be less intricately detailed in the lead, as Boswell simply describes the Royal Marines as mountain commandos in his book's title
- Seems non-standard to have a dedicated geography section, better to split up the details and mention only those relevant to an article. For example, there is no connection explained as to why coastal shipping is relevant to the skirmish. I haven't seen a battle article that goes into detail on the terrain of the region that the action took place in
- I often include a geography section. See, for example, Admiralty Islands campaign and Landing at Nadzab, both featured articles. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 00:46, 1 July 2022 (UTC)
- Tensions between Britain and Argentina over a disputed territory the British called Falkland Islands and the Argentinians called Islas Malvinas I will note that the Falkland Islands War article takes a less equivocal position in describing the Falklands as a British dependent territory, which seems a more accurate summary of the situation
- The Argentine 602 Commando Company was formed from 54 commando-trained soldiers on 21 May 1982 and arrived in the Falklands a few days later If the British had already landed in the Falklands on 21 May, how did the Argentine commandos infiltrate in, this isn't explained in the article
- where they observed British air activity, where they were joined by the missing eight men choppy sentence with repetition of 'where they'
- tactical approach suggest rewording jargon-sounding term
- Boswell went to 3 Commando Brigade headquarters did Boswell literally go to the HQ or did he just request an airstrike? This sentence seems to be unnecessarily detailed
- An "O Group", a formal process by which a commander informs his subordinates of the tasks they must perform in order to carry out a mission Suggest just calling this a briefing
- provided screening from the accurate fire from the Argentine commandos firing from a stream bed three usages of 'from' in one sentence
- six members of his patrol wounded, Inconsistent with casualties section, which says seven wounded
- Is there any other impact or tactical significance to this action other than described in the article?
Otherwise, an interesting article on a subject that receives little attention. Kges1901 (talk) 23:15, 30 June 2022 (UTC)
- Even in the context of the Falklands War, this was a small action, but it seems to have received a disproportionate amount of attention in Argentina and Britain. I think the odd worm-eye-view article can be useful and informative. This is the smallest action I have written up; the Battle of Kaiapit involved a company. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 21:40, 5 July 2022 (UTC)
- @Kges1901: I have finished making changes now. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 21:40, 5 July 2022 (UTC)