Talk:Snow camouflage/GA1
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Reviewer: FunkMonk (talk · contribs) 13:37, 12 April 2017 (UTC)
- Many thanks for taking this on. Chiswick Chap (talk) 13:45, 12 April 2017 (UTC)
- Hi, I'll review this soon. First thought, the photo of the willow grouse could benefit form being right aligned; now it interferes with the table, which is pushed to the right, unlike the two other tables. Also, it is better for subjects in photos to face the text. FunkMonk (talk) 13:37, 12 April 2017 (UTC)
- Interesting reasons! Done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 13:46, 12 April 2017 (UTC)
- When it comes to snow camouflage in animals, you only seem to focus on seasonal camouflage. What about polar bears, snow owls, Arctic wolves, etc? Seems like an oversight.
- OK, Added a mention of always-white Arctic animals, and an image. Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:03, 12 April 2017 (UTC)
- Alright, but the intro should not have unique info, only be a summary of the article body, so there should be elaboration further down. FunkMonk (talk) 12:59, 13 April 2017 (UTC)
- It's all in the Among animals section.
- It would seem that having the "White as camouflage" section before "Seasonal polyphenism" would make more sense? It explains what the camouflage is for in general, whereas the seasonal stuff is more specific. FunkMonk (talk) 12:42, 13 April 2017 (UTC)
- It's all in the Among animals section.
- Alright, but the intro should not have unique info, only be a summary of the article body, so there should be elaboration further down. FunkMonk (talk) 12:59, 13 April 2017 (UTC)
- Done.
- OK, Added a mention of always-white Arctic animals, and an image. Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:03, 12 April 2017 (UTC)
- No pre-WW2 examples of snow-camouflage?
- There's very little, as it was generally improvised, but I've found brief refs and a nice image from the IWM.
- The title "Snow camouflage in animals" seems a bit too general, since all the examples shown are only those that change coat.
- Seasonal polyphenism it is.
- Maybe you could elaborate on the different reasons why animals would need snow camouflage. I wouldn't think polar bears or wolves are afraid of other predators, so it must be to aid in hunting?
- Done, you agree with Cott!
- Nice fixes, I'll pass, seems more well-rounded now. FunkMonk (talk) 21:56, 14 April 2017 (UTC)
- Many thanks for the review, and Happy Easter! Chiswick Chap (talk) 07:06, 15 April 2017 (UTC)