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Reviewer: SNUGGUMS (talk · contribs) 05:54, 7 September 2014 (UTC)
- Hello, thank you for taking this on! I'm just letting you know that my laptop screen has smashed (think on these lines :/) and so I'm currently hooked up to an old external monitor until I can take it to be repaired. I think this won't take more than 48 hours, but if I'm late replying to some comments then just know it's because of that. Cheers, —JennKR | ☎ 20:38, 14 September 2014 (UTC)
- Infobox
Just using "rock" would be simpler than its subgenres "pop rock" and "art rock"
"Passion" should read out Passion: Music for The Last Temptation of Christ in full
It would help to have specific release dates for the singles
- Lead
Information on the title and Gabriel's taste for titles is trivial
- Not Done—Gabriel was notorious for not titling his albums, leaving his fans to make up nicknames which effectively became the official title (which Gabriel, his label and journalists would use). The fact that he was almost forced to do so by his label is significant to its release and significant in explaining why this album is titled quite strangely. —JennKR | ☎ 21:58, 15 September 2014 (UTC)
"commercially accessible"..... awkward word choice
include what critics particularly praised about the album
- Done
Some details on commercial aspects on the other singles would be nice, even if not as prominent as "SledgeHammer"
- Background
Much of this seems to be on Gabriel's career with Genesis and his previous solo albums, I would instead include information that pertains specifically to this album as what's in here now seems better off in his main article.
- Done There isn't a great deal to say about the early 80s, but I've refocused the content on this. —JennKR | ☎ 22:51, 17 September 2014 (UTC)
- Better..... but honestly the first paragraph is purely fluff that has nothing to do with this album. I'm tempted to say that the second paragraph should be merged into the next section as "background and recording".
"Aside from these releases, Gabriel founded the World Music, Arts and Dance Festival (WOMAD), releasing a WOMAD album featuring himself, Robert Fripp, Pete Townshend and other world music artists"..... needs a citation
- Composition
Link The New York Times
- Side One
"Gabriel's voice is prominent on the track"..... reads awkwardly
"most significant political statement"..... prominent would be more neutral
- Side two
"Its lyrics, that satirise the yuppie culture of the 1980s, as well as materialism and consumerism, are the result of Gabriel's self-examination, after he considered whether he may have desired fame after all"..... let's remove "as well as" after "1980s", remove "that" after "lyrics", add an "and" after "consumerism"
- Release
See note about regarding album title info
Shouldn't singles and promotion have their own sections?
- Critical reception
Unlink Jon Pareles and The New York Times
Include Lynn Van Matre as the reviewer's name from Chicago Tribune
- References
Shouldn't the "notes" have their own section?
FN6: Link Stephen Thomas Erlewine, unlink AllMusic- FN20: YouTube is generally discouraged as a source- it can lead to copyright issues in some cases, other instances are often user-generated
- WP:VIDEOREF: There are channels on YouTube for videos uploaded by agencies and organizations that are generally considered reliable sources. I would argue a Google Talk constitutes this, especially as it has been uploaded by Google.
- Certainly reliable when it's from an official channel, though I was worried about potential copyright per WP:YOUTUBE and WP:NOYT. While this could be an exception, it's generally better to have non-YouTube links, particularly when high-quality secondary sources are available. Snuggums (talk / edits) 02:07, 16 September 2014 (UTC)
FN's 49 and 64: Unlink Rolling StoneFN82: reliable?
- I'm guessing this is Ultimate Classic Rock (and not Amazon)? I think you're right to question this and I'll find an alternative. —JennKR | ☎ 21:07, 14 September 2014 (UTC)
FN83: Remove "Inc." from "Amazon.com, Inc"- FN84: Should read "Erlewine, Stephen Thomas" rather than "Stephen Thomas, Erlewine"
- FN85: Same as FN83
FN86: page number(s)?
FN87: "austriancharts.at" should read "Should read "Austrian Albums Chart"- FN89: Should read MegaCharts
- FN90: Remove "infodisc.fr."
- FN91: Should read Federazione Industria Musicale Italiana
FN92: Same as FN86
FN93: Should read Recorded Music NZ- FN95: Should read Sverigetopplistan
- FN96: Should read Swiss Hitparade
- FN99: Same as FN87
- FN101: Should read MegaCharts
- FN102: Same as FN90
- FN103: Same as FN96
FN111: Remove "en geluidsdragers"
- GA Result
- On hold for seven days