Talk:Sojourner (rover)/GA1
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Reviewer: CactiStaccingCrane (talk · contribs) 06:59, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
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Some sentences should be more neutral.- Maybe you can point me to the problematic sentences? Artem.G (talk) 17:27, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
- Actually, nevermind, there's nothing wrong with the tone. My bad CactiStaccingCrane (talk)
- Maybe you can point me to the problematic sentences? Artem.G (talk) 17:27, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
Formatting & styling[edit]
- Adding small text for credits to rover designers is not in line with Wikipedia's manual of style. You might want to merge it to prose.
- Coordinates of landing should be replaced by name of relative location in Mars.
- Some lone-sentences should be merged to paragraphs.
- Elements names don't need to be labeled with it's element symbol. This problem is fixed by me, Cacti.
- Some grammar mistakes are seen, although most of them are very minor. Some of the typo is fixed by me, Cacti.
Other than that, the article is very well done! Great job! CactiStaccingCrane (talk) 07:58, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
- Thanks for your review! I am mostly offline till the end of the month, but I will definitely address all the points you mentioned. I'll ping you when everything will be resolved. Artem.G (talk) 17:27, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
- CactiStaccingCrane (talk · contribs), I think that everything is done, please look through it when you have time. Artem.G (talk) 10:04, 1 October 2021 (UTC)
- Well, I think that this article is a now, great job! (Also, I like the amount of detail of the article as a space nerd :)) CactiStaccingCrane (talk) 10:16, 1 October 2021 (UTC)
- @Artem.G Here you go, I have edited the article to show the icon and the wikiproject assessment. CactiStaccingCrane (talk) 10:20, 1 October 2021 (UTC)
- Thanks a lot, it was my first attempt of writing a GA, and it took a lot of time :) Artem.G (talk) 10:41, 1 October 2021 (UTC)
- Well, I think you should aim for the next big thing, which is . It is the highest article class you can achieve. Here's the page about it: Wikipedia:Featured articles. I personally have an article that I'm trying to get as well, so you have a company :) CactiStaccingCrane (talk) 12:56, 1 October 2021 (UTC)
- Well, I think that this article is a now, great job! (Also, I like the amount of detail of the article as a space nerd :)) CactiStaccingCrane (talk) 10:16, 1 October 2021 (UTC)