Talk:SpongeBob SquarePants (musical)
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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 19:45, 7 April 2020 (UTC)
- "SpongeBob SquarePants: The Broadway Musical (originally titled The SpongeBob Musical, later retitled as such for the national tour)" - I was concerned that I didn't find a source for this anywhere. Perhaps add it (and mention it) under "Productions", after - "A non-Equity North American tour opened on September 22, 2019, in Schenectady, New York, at Proctors Theatre."
- "On January 16, 2014, The Flaming Lips' lead singer Wayne Coyne mentioned through Twitter that he was writing lyrics for a developing SpongeBob musical"." - are there no references to the musical before this date? (ideally a non-Twitter ref)? You say in the lead that the show was co-conceived by " Tina Landau". Who else conceived it? Might the conception of the show be worth adding to the "Development" section?
- You mention that the "musical's budget was between $15 and $20 million", but later, you say "...without recouping its $18 million cost." Which is right? If it cost $18M, perhaps add that to development?
- "The townspeople, unknowingly, support this idea and decide to hold a last-minute music concert to raise money. Squidward's idea of his one-man show is immediately shut down." - the Squidward bit feels like an afterthought. The townspeople hold a last-minute music concert featuring Squidward, right? I'm trying to follow the plot...
- "Patrick saves him with the jetpack Sandy invented" - that should be "a" jetpack, since that's not mentioned yet in the article, so it shouldn't be a definitive "the"
- "However, due to the band being gone, there is no concert or escape pod" - I thought the escape pod was just a ploy by Plankton/Karen, so there wouldn't be one, right?
- Any references for the composers in "Musical numbers"?
- Is it worth adding that "No Control" wasn't written for the show?
- You link to the album "Best Day Ever". So I see now that not all of the songs were written for the show. Maybe none of them were. I couldn't tell from the article.
- Could you add any more instruments, or content, for the one sentence section "Instrumentation"?
- "On June 28, 2016, it was announced" - who announced it?
- How long did the North American tour last?
- "On October 17, 2019, it was announced that Nickelodeon would air" - change so instead of "it", you say "Nickelodeon announced it would air..." - active voice is much stronger writing
- Any ratings, or anything else about the live for TV production? Considering the live musical events that NBC has had in recent years, I'd imagine there is some more content out there. It might be worth noting what changes they made for TV (I see one of the songs was cut). You also mentioned " abbreviated airings of the TV special", so I take it the TV special aired more than once? And that they made it shorter?
- Any critical response about the tour?
- Source for Chita Rivera Awards for Dance and Choreography? Tony Awards nominations? Theatre World Award?
- Ref 52 is incomplete
The article is in decent shape, so I hope none of my comments are too difficult to address. Good work on this article. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 19:45, 7 April 2020 (UTC)