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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 18:12, 9 April 2017 (UTC)
I'll give this a review. Wizardman 18:12, 9 April 2017 (UTC)
Here's what I found:
- The Go series link in the infobox can be removed, since it's just redirecting right back to this article.
- "And they viewed the critical response to Deus Ex Go" Don't start a sentence with and.
- i'm not a fan of starting them with but either if you can changed the sentence in that one as well, though that's not a deal breaker.
Not much to modify, article's on hold until fixed. Wizardman 02:24, 15 April 2017 (UTC)
- Thanks, @Wizardman! Done. It should be okay to start a sentence with "And" as long as it isn't a fragment, but no complaint here—I found a better rephrase anyway. czar 08:11, 15 April 2017 (UTC)
- Looks good now. Using and for a sentence beginning isn't technically an MOS violation, it just looks wrong to me and ruins article flow. Anyway, the article passes as a GA. Wizardman 15:41, 15 April 2017 (UTC)