Talk:Stephen Sutton/GA1
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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 00:28, 19 May 2016 (UTC)
Happy to review. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 00:28, 19 May 2016 (UTC)
Fairly well-written, only a few comments: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 01:17, 19 May 2016 (UTC)
- You may wikilink "bowel cancer"
- In "Early life", perhaps add when the interview took place in the line In his final interview, to the Daily Mail...
- In "Illness and activism",
- In "Documentary",
- Just curious, I wonder why the inverted commas in the quotes should look different. I think you can use the same template.
- Place some citations at the end of the first para, it looks unsourced just now.
- with his best friends "close friends" would sound more proper
- The documentary is currently in development and will be made into a feature-length film. Don't say "currently", say "as of 2016" (if this documentary is still under development).
- In "Death and reaction"
- In "Music"
- You can simply say "bucket list", not "Bucket List"
- A dablink or two need to be fixed. [1]
No copyvio detected, images are properly licensed. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 01:17, 19 May 2016 (UTC)
Sainsf all queries have been responded to. '''tAD''' (talk) 15:36, 19 May 2016 (UTC)
- Thanks for the response. This can be promoted. Great article! Sainsf (talk · contribs) 17:23, 19 May 2016 (UTC)
Burial - questionable statement (section Death and reaction)[edit]
The paragraph mentioning his funeral states "He was buried the next day". However the BBC News release used as citation does not explicitly state when his burial took place. I therefore question whether the citation should be regarded as supporting the statement. I would be inclined to rephrase the sentence "He was privately buried later" to fit what the citation says, though "later" is an open-ended term.Cloptonson (talk) 06:47, 15 December 2022 (UTC)