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Reviewer: Вик Ретлхед (talk · contribs) 09:49, 7 June 2014 (UTC)
Beginning the review. Glad to be working with a great friend of mine again.
- Lead
- "The album begin with two cover songs"→begins (third person singular)
Done
- addiction of alcohol→alcohol addiction
Done
- The cn template should be dealt with.
- "spawned"→released, to be more "encyclopedic" in the intro
Done
- Conception
- album art→artwork
Done
- recording process→recording (process adds nothing)
Done
- Compositions and lyrics
- would later be covered by rock band Green Day→suggest writing this in past simple ("was covered") and omitting Green Day's genre (they are punk rock as far as I know)
- I changed it to The album's third track, "Outsider," was written by Dee Dee and in 2002, it was covered by Green Day on Shenanigans.
- delink music journalist
Done
- "—The song"→perhaps ";" would fit better the purpose? (with small "t" of course)
Done
- fan-base→fanbase
- I put fandom instead, since I believe it is more encyclopedic as it has its own entry.
- be consistent with the quote marks per WP:MOSLQ
- Can you point out specific examples of this? I could not find any myself but I may be overlooking them.
- Nothing serious. It can stay the way it is.
- Release and reception
- Robert Christgau said→wrote, since the column appeared in The Village Voice
Done
- The following personnel can be verified with AllMusic→Credits are adapted from Allmusic
Done
- Personnel
- The following credits have are adapted from AllMusic→Credits are adapted from Allmusic
OK, review is done, I'm happy to pass the article. I smell another good topic here.--Retrohead (talk) 20:01, 8 June 2014 (UTC)