Talk:Sulphide portrait glassware/GA1
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Nominator: TwoScars (talk · contribs) 19:42, 27 August 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Rollinginhisgrave (talk · contribs) 19:02, 15 September 2024 (UTC)
I'll review this in the next day. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 19:02, 15 September 2024 (UTC)
Content and prose
[edit]- Link: silver sulphide,
- Gloss: Josiah Wedgwood, Apsley Pellatt, Benjamin Bakewell
In the United States, Pittsburghcurrent (early 1800s) politicians
then currentfinal quarter of the
late, less verboseThey also were set in plaques of glass
they also were sometimes / they could also beto sides or bottoms
add articleviewing through the glass
past tensebaked to a hardness
could you explain what this means?Bakewell was very familiar with French and English fashions and styles.
integrate this better, significance is confusing hereother partners
different word than otherglass making company
I think this needs to be hyphenated as it's functioning as an adjectiveand it reorganized again under the name Bakewell, Page and Bakewell
after September 1813 or during?About $45,000
clarify "that year"At times he would present gifts of glassware
I'm guessing to public figures? Or just in general?Benjamin Bakewell moved to New York ....glassware for the White House.
this is a lot of detail without mentioning sulphide glassware once. Needs to be cut way down to contextualize information relevant to sulphide glassware, or integrate discussion of article subject better.- There is a brief mention that it was still being produced in Europe, but more attention is paid to the fact it wasn't being produced by one company in the United States. Needs a lot more discussion of European production to be balanced.
Suggestions
[edit]- Might be bold, but I would cut Barthélemy Desprez. The name adds nothing, and he doesn't appear to be notable. If he is, I would suggest redlinking him.
Later in the year
→that year
American Revolutionary War hero
false title
Other
[edit]- Neutral
- Broad / summary style Issues raised above; very focused on the US, and includes a lot of extra info on company without discussing sulphide portrait glassware for a while.
- No COPYVIO / OR ; 11.5% earwig, name of source.
- Stable
- Illustrated beautifully, all subjects in public domain, no issues there
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- [12] AGF, can't access
- [17] {y}}
- [20] Could you get me a quote from this supporting this text?