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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 08:21, 8 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]

I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 08:21, 8 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]

  • Cropping isn't a creative act covered by copyright. You need to copy over all the licensing info from the original photo.
Done. AM
  • Photos from British magazines after 1928 are still in US copyright.
Magazine images removed. AM
No idea, so image removed. AM
  • You have two identical photos, find a substitute for one of them.
Sorted, dup image removed. AM
  • Primarily used as a reconnaissance aircraft, it was the first British squadron-service aircraft to incorporate a fully retractable main undercarriage, crew accommodation that was enclosed, and a fuselage completely made of metal. Needs a cite
Sorted. AM
  • I would strongly suggest merging the Development and Design paragraphs together, leading off with the rationale for the program and order for a prototype, transitioning to the description and finishing with the production info. I believe that that would flow much more smoothly, preventing issues like describing the changes made between the prototype and production aircraft before you've even described the aircraft at all.
Sections reordered as suggested, titles amended as well.
  • Always tell the reader what type of ship (with links!) one is when introducing it to the reader
Done. AM
I was thinking more of a simple battleship or heavy cruiser, but links to the class will do. Be advised, though, that you've now got a lot of duplicate links.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 00:29, 28 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Dup links now removed. AM
  • Explicate the orders for the Seagull V in more detail. Was it just RAN and just 24 aircraft?
Sorted. AM
  • The term and associated link maritime reconnaissance or patrol aircraft should be used rather than simply reconnaissance or observation.
Done. AM
  • plywood wings were of equal span wings awkward
Sorted. AM
  • Link sweepback, float, rudder, tail wheel, taxi, crane
Done. AM
  • Suggest deleting the cost conversions as capital costs have increased far more rapidly than have consumer costs.
Done. AM
  • Add production numbers for each to the variant section
Done. AM
Serials of each batch not generally necessary, FYI--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 00:29, 28 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]
I'll remove them. as I think they clutter up the article. Amitchell125 (talk) 18:49, 28 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Above comments addressed (hopefully). Amitchell125 (talk) 08:50, 25 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]