Talk:Susan Peters/GA1

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Reviewer: QatarStarsLeague (talk · contribs) 17:16, 24 June 2018 (UTC)

Review coming soon. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 17:16, 24 June 2018 (UTC)

• Quick comment by a non-reviewer who had a thought: the current article mixes citation styles, between including full citations in the ref tags and including a brief in-line with the full citation at the bottom. I don't know off the top of my head was the MOS says about this, but I'd imagine it would look nicer if one or the other was used consistently (probably the latter). —Compassionate727 ^(T·C) 02:48, 25 June 2018 (UTC)
  • Agreed, and doubly so in that the latter method is probably more appropriate. For articles rife with sources such as this one, it seems to be the preferred style.

*" In 1928, Robert Carnahan was killed in a car accident in Portland..." Later it is referenced that indeed the father is the one who perished, but perhaps that should be made clear within this sentence.

Got it--didn't even think about the confusion between Robert Sr. and Robert Jr.--Drown Soda (talk) 03:46, 13 August 2018 (UTC)

*"Peters was educated at Laird Hall School for Girls..." Is the location of this school known?

As far as I can tell, the location is not known. It is mentioned in the Crivello source as one of several schools she attended, but I have not been able to find the location; I'm presuming the school is defunct.--Drown Soda (talk) 03:46, 13 August 2018 (UTC)

*"In the film, Peters portrayed a young woman from Boston in love with a Kansas military officer" We could link to both locales.

Done.--Drown Soda (talk) 03:46, 13 August 2018 (UTC)

*"Following her divorce in 1948 and facing a lack of opportunity as an actress..." Would think this would warrant a more expansive mention at the appropriate point (1948) in the career summary

I've relocated this to the appropriate section; I think it was intended to express a cumulative depression that had began after her accident but reached a crescendo c. 1951, though it makes more sense to include its start point within the proper sequence of events.--Drown Soda (talk) 03:46, 13 August 2018 (UTC)

*The legacy section is perhaps too short. Something else that might sanction a mention here would be the lasting impact of any of her roles/films. I just think the section is too diminutive as is. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 17:18, 9 July 2018 (UTC)

I agree, though I'm not sure what else to include here, and what's there doesn't necessarily fit neatly within a timeline biography. I can try to find more scholarly sources, though there has been little written on her in regard to her legacy, so perhaps it should be cut out? I suppose the Hollywood Walk of Fame Star could be mentioned within her biography.--Drown Soda (talk) 03:46, 13 August 2018 (UTC)