Talk:Sword of Mana/GA1

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Reviewer: ProtoDrake (talk · contribs) 18:22, 8 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this. Expect my comments and such in a day or two. --ProtoDrake (talk) 18:22, 8 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Review

Here we go. Overall, it's a very good article. There are only a few minor points that need addressing or explaining.

Sentence in the lead: "While incorporating gameplay elements from the original game and generally following the same plot, Sword of Mana has a distinct gameplay and a much more involved story." The "has a distinct gameplay and" part seems a little off grammar wise. I think it needs correcting, but if it doesn't, you can explain why.

It's technically fine, but sounds wrong because I use gameplay as an adjective earlier in the sentence and then use it as a singular noun. Since "sounds wrong" is a valid complaint, changed. --Pres N 21:04, 10 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"Like the previous games in the series" - Too many "the"s, unless it's a stylistic choice based on the gameplay sections of previous articles.

No, the other articles don't have that first "the". Neither does this one, now. --Pres N 21:04, 10 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"After the release of the previous game in the Mana series, 1999's Legend of Mana, several members of the development team..." - Legend of Mana isn't linked anywhere in the article.

Last sentence of Gameplay, actually. --Pres N 21:04, 10 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Refs 6, 9 and 11 need author(s) adding if possible.

All three of these are by "IGN Staff" or "GameSpot Staff", and so don't have an author listed. My understanding is that you don't list an author unless there's a specific byline'd author to list. --Pres N 21:04, 10 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

And that's it, unless I missed anything. Once these are dealt with or explained adequately, I think this article can pass with flying colors. --ProtoDrake (talk) 20:48, 10 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

@ProtoDrake: Responded inline. --Pres N 21:04, 10 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Right. Thanks for the prompt response. I'll rate this article as a Pass. --ProtoDrake (talk) 21:07, 10 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]