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Reviewer: Glimmer721 (talk · contribs) 00:14, 23 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I'll try to get around to this tomorrow. Glimmer721 talk 00:14, 23 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Ack, I totally forgot about this. Sorry about that. Here are my comments:
  • "the 22nd episode" → "the twenty-second episode", maybe? I'm not sure what the standard for Star Trek is, though the latter seems more professional to me.
  • No problem, changed to twenty-second episode as suggested. Miyagawa (talk) 20:09, 27 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The episode was written after executive producer Maurice Hurley worked on Miami Vice." Mention why this is significant in terms of the episode.
  • Maybe put the date after Wrath of Khan in parenthesis (in both the lead and "production")
  • "The Enterprise crew attempts to transport the crew" Clarify who the second crew is ("the freighter's crew")
  • Done. Also added it to the lead, and linked it there. Miyagawa (talk) 20:09, 27 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • ""Symbiosis" was filmed after "Skin of Evil", which featured the death of Tasha Yar. However, this was the final filmed appearance of Denise Crosby..." "However" is better replaced by a semicolon (linking the sentences) because the second sentence follows logically from the first: nothing is contradicted.
  • I'd move the Reading Rainbow sentence to the end of the paragraph
  • "Michelle Erica Green for TrekNation thought that the episode could have been better, partly due to the quality of the guest cast." The two clauses aren't quite linked. Maybe "...thought that the episode could have been better if the guest cast was up to a better quality".
  • "..several TNG series one writing errors..." season one, we're American :)
  • Troi and Riker need to be linked; they haven't been mentioned at all previously in the article
  • IGN in the final ref doesn't need to be italicized; it's not a print source
  • By the way, my edits trying to put the appropriate quotation marks in the navbox were reverted again...
  • Flipped back to your version. Looks like the standard format for those templates. Miyagawa (talk) 20:13, 27 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Hm, I don't think I every saw this episode. Anyway, great work as always, with only minor concerns. On hold for 7 days. It's great to see these episodes getting some attention. Glimmer721 talk 00:31, 27 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

All right, happy to pass this one now. Glimmer721 talk 16:35, 28 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]