Talk:The Best Thing (Ivy song)/GA1

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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 03:04, 20 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

  • Grabbing this for a review. Since the nominator is currently on vacation, I will put up my comments soon and leave it open for whenever he comes back/has the time. Aoba47 (talk) 03:04, 20 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Infobox and lead
  • I would add the recording locations to the infobox. You can either list all of them as done in S&M (song) or just put New York City as done in Missing My Baby
Done
  • Rather than saying “included on”, I would just say “on” and remove the comma between Ivy and on.
Done
  • I would revise the phrase ("The Best Thing" is accompanied by the use of several guitars and a keyboard.) to ("The Best Thing" is accompanied by several guitars and a keyboard.) as the phrase “the use of” sounds awkward in this context.
Done
  • I would say “performed” rather than “as performed” just for concise language.
Done
  • I do not believe “Additionally” is necessary so you can remove that.
Done
  • Rather than citing Discogs, I would cite the liner notes directly.
  • That is actually their official website, but it just happened to be titled "Discog" lol. Carbrera (talk) 06:50, 21 July 2017 (UTC).[reply]
  • Oh, that makes more sense. I should have checked it out myself before making the comment. Thank you for the clarification. Aoba47 (talk) 14:28, 21 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Background and release
  • The first sentence of the first paragraph has “This is the Day” instead of “The Best Thing” so please revise that.
Done – how embarrassing. Carbrera (talk) 06:50, 21 July 2017 (UTC).[reply]
  • Please link CD single on its first use in the firsrt pagaraph.
Done
  • Just a clarification question, but was there any reason that the b-side was a song performed by another band?
Probably just record label promotion; this practice seemed to be quite popular in the 70s and 80s, but I cannot provide a solid explanation for why it was done here. You can still but the vinyl online sometimes; I believe Ebay has an auction up. Carbrera (talk) 06:50, 21 July 2017 (UTC).[reply]
  • Makes sense; just was curious about this. Aoba47 (talk) 14:28, 21 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • Since the first paragraph is quite long (especially in comparison to the second one), I would recommend splitting it into two with first sentence of the new second paragraph being the one starting with “According to the liner notes of the aforementioned release…”. This would have the new first paragraph focused on the different formats and the new second paragraph would be on the radio aspects/record label opinon on radioplay.
Done
Compostiion and production
  • I do not believe the transition “furthermore” is necessary so I would remove it.
Done
  • I would add the recording studios to this section as they are known.
Done
  • Otherwise, great work with this section.
Thank you! Carbrera (talk) 06:50, 21 July 2017 (UTC).[reply]
Critical reception
  • I would just say “AllMusic’s Jack Rabid” as the “a review by” sounds a little weird, especially since the verb “calling would be going back to the review and that is a little odd in this context.
Done
Track listings and formats
  • Everything looks great here.
Thank you! Carbrera (talk) 06:50, 21 July 2017 (UTC).[reply]
Credits and personnel
  • Everything looks good here too.
Thank you! Carbrera (talk) 06:50, 21 July 2017 (UTC).[reply]
References and External links
  • No complaints for these two sections either.
Thank you! Carbrera (talk) 06:50, 21 July 2017 (UTC).[reply]
Final comments
  • Wonderful work with this list. It was an interesting read. Something about listening to Ivy always makes me feel nostalgic (maybe it’s because I grew up in the 90s and 00s). I will keep this open as long as you need. Once my comments are addressed, I will pass this. Hope you are having a wonderful week so far. Aoba47 (talk) 03:25, 20 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • Aoba47 – thanks for the review. I completed your review. Glad to see you like Ivy; they are quite the group. Regards, Carbrera (talk) 06:50, 21 July 2017 (UTC).[reply]
  • Thank you for addressing my comments. I will ✓ Pass this. Great work as always. Aoba47 (talk) 14:28, 21 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
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