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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 22:28, 16 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Lead and infobox

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  • I would include more information from the “Background” section in the Lead.
Done. Azealia911 talk
  • The following sentence “Lyrically, the track discusses staying true to oneself and remembering your roots should you become famous.” reads very awkwardly and should be rephrased. It is a little too wordy for my taste.
Done. Azealia911 talk
  • Specify the meaning behind the phrase “a typical Azealia Banks song”. What aspects of a song’s instrumental and overall sound make it “a typical Azealia Banks song” (or more importantly what parts are the credits identifying?) Right now, it sounds a little vague and would not make any sense to anyone unfamiliar with Banks' music.
Altered to something backed up within article. Azealia911 talk

Background

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  • The sentences about her debut studio album seem like unnecessary padding for this section. I would remove the first three sentences, as they are not directly connected to the single.
Done. Azealia911 talk
  • I would expand on the sentence about Banks’ tweets about Donald Trump. Who are the critics you are mentioning? Any quotes or more specific information about how she was using the tweets to gain publicity? You can break it into a couple sentences if it comes to it.
Done. Azealia911 talk
  • The infobox shows the song is “Self-released”, but it is not really brought up in this section. I am thinking the final sentence about Banks uploading the song to her SoundCloud as Banks releasing the single on her own, but the meaning could be made clearer. I think somewhere in the section, you should bring up and talk about the single being “Self-released”.
Done. Azealia911 talk

Composition

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  • Specify the sample as uncredited in the first sentence.
Done. Azealia911 talk
  • Replace “self-described” with “described”
Done. Azealia911 talk
  • Great work in this section overall!

Critical reception

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  • Is there a particular reason why you chose this image to represent The Notorious B.I.G.? I would think an image of the man himself would be more appropriate.
It's unfortunately the only free picture that we have to hand. I first considered his main identifying picture on his article, but it's non-free. The only alternative was this... I couldn't think of who/what else to have a picture of, so I went with that one. Azealia911 talk
Thank you for the response; I agree that this is the best picture you could use. Just wanted to double-check here. Aoba47 (talk) 22:18, 17 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • Image needs a better alt. (It should give a general representation of the image and not just repeat the same idea from the caption) and I would encourage you to use “upright”
Done. Azealia911 talk
  • Other than my comments on the image, this section is very strong and I am very impressed with the work put into finding the sources.

References

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  • Great job with your sources. I am very impressed with the work put into the article and I appreciate that you archived all your sources.

Final comment

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@Azealia911: This article is strong overall, but I just have minor issues with some sections (particularly the Lead and Background sections). Once my comments are addressed, this should be a quick and easy pass. Let me know if you have any questions or comments about my review.

Thankyou for reviewing this article, I've addressed all of your comments.
@Azealia911: Great job here! I am very impressed that you could gather all this research and make a really great article out of it as the song is relatively new. Just a note for the future, but make sure to update this page if more information comes out about the single (especially around the time that the mixtape is released). A very easy ✓ Pass and I look forward to possibly reviewing more of your articles in the future. Aoba47 (talk) 22:18, 17 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:
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