Talk:The Cham-Cham/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: BelovedFreak 09:53, 13 March 2011 (UTC)

GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

   Well written, just a few queries below

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

   no problems here

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

   No problems, plot could possibly be trimmed slightly

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

   No problems, it's neutral and balanced

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

   No problems with stability; no evidence of edit wars or content disputes.

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

   No problems, only image has appropriate rationale and source information

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

This is a well-written article that is very close to GA. I just have a few queries/suggestions/nitpicks below.

• There are no apparent problems with plagiarism or close-paraphrasing after checking with CorenBot, Earwig's tool and spotchecks of sources. No links to disambiguation pages and no dead links.

Lead

• "One of the final instalments of the first season..." - is season how it's referred to in sources? Aren't British tv programmes usually described as having series rather than seasons?

This is true - changed to "Series One". I believe that I opted for "season" due to the proximity of "... television series" in the preceding sentence. It seems odd to me to refer to specific "series" within a "television series", but as ever, the classic idiosyncracies of British English dictate otherwise...

• I don't know the answer to this, but was wondering if the title to a mini-LP should be in italics? The titles of EPs, for example, are.

Glancing at some relevant articles, it seems clear that italics are preferred for album titles, while the names of singles use quotation marks. Thanks for pointing the above out.

• The audio adaptation should be mentioned somewhere in the article

Plot

• This seemed slightly long to me, on checking the word count I see that it's only just over the recommended 200-500 words, so it's not really a problem, but if you were wanting to cut it down, there is perhaps some detail in the escape part in the final paragraph which could be cut without altering the reader's understanding.

I've trimmed the synopsis a bit, especially towards the end. I believe that a rough guideline for plot sections in episode articles is to write no more than about ten words for each minute of screentime - a summary running to approximately 500 words would therefore not be excessive in the case of the Thunderbirds episodes, which are 50 minutes in length.

• Are Cass Carnaby and his band currently touring a hotel?
• phone → telephone
• "...start to perform Olsen's latest version of "Dangerous Game" that will doom the latest flight." - repetition of latest - I don't know if that's intentional
• Again, I don't know the answer to this, but should Thunderbird 1 and Thunderbird 2 be in italics?

I would think so, given that these two machines are both aircraft, and that the Thunderbirds form a collection of vehicles or vessels. Space Shuttle names are italicised in such articles as Space Shuttle Discovery, so it follows that a fictional spacecraft like Thunderbird 3 would incorporate italics in its own name - and it would therefore be logical to italicise the names of all machines in the Thunderbirds fleet. There appears to be some variation on the subject in the book sources that I have used.

Production

• You've linked Brains' name, but not Penelope's - this should be consistent
• Do you need to link ballroom and skiing?
• Is it this Ken Barrie? (If so, could be linked)

Reception

• Again, do you need to link skiing?

I'll place the article on hold for 7 days to allow you to respond to the above. --BelovedFreak 10:03, 17 March 2011 (UTC)

Thank you for another fine GA review! Resolved points have been struck through. SuperMarioMan 03:16, 18 March 2011 (UTC)

I see you've made quite a few changes, it's looking really good now. Considering I don't really have any interest in Thunderbirds etc. in real life, I always enjoy reading your articles! Good work, I'm happy to list it as a good article. --BelovedFreak 20:38, 18 March 2011 (UTC)

Many thanks once again. SuperMarioMan 21:21, 18 March 2011 (UTC)