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Reviewer: SNUGGUMS (talk · contribs) 15:32, 16 May 2015 (UTC)
I'll take this. Expect comments within a few days. Ping me or post on my talk page if the review is not up by then. Snuggums (talk / edits) 15:32, 16 May 2015 (UTC)
Sorry for the delay; I got sidetracked and am drafting the review. It should be up before May ends. Snuggums (talk / edits) 20:39, 28 May 2015 (UTC)
- Infobox
- For genres, EDM is not mentioned in given reference (FN2)
- Lead
- Since the view count on YouTube is subject to change, it's best to use a source other than YouTube and attribute its view count and date range to that
- I don't think the amount of time spent at #6 in the US is needed
- I kveld med YLVIS isn't mentioned in attributed source
- "'The Fox', 'created to fail', has ironically and accidentally gone viral" → "While the song was "created to fail", it went viral"
- Production
- "In an interview with Norwegian newspaper Aftenposten, the brothers stated" → "The brothers told Aftenposten"
- No need to have "In an interview" for "In an interview on the Norwegian-Swedish talk show Skavlan"
- "Bård described the writing process for "The Fox" in an interview with Billboard in the United States" → "Bård told Billboard that"
- "Bård, being interviewed by Entertainment Weekly, talked about their intention of making 'The Fox'" simply doesn't read well
- "M4SONIC described producing 'The Fox':"..... awkward phrasing
- Try to paraphrase the last two quotes; they're rather lengthy
- Music video and composition
- This should have its own section and not be a subsection of "Production"
- "typical" in "typical electronic dance pop" is unneeded and vague
- "increasingly absurd" sounds biased
- I'd merge the third and fourth paragraph per MOS:PARAGRAPHS, which discourages really short paragraphs
- Reception and responses
- I'd simply title this "reception"
- Not sure that top quote from Bård is needed
- "Catchiness" isn't really a neutral description
- Live performances
- This should be its own section
- It might help to include commentary on performances
- "The song was later performed live during concerts given in 2014-2015 in Norway and Sweden as a part of duo's The Expensive Jacket Tour" needs to be sourced, and "2014-2015" should be "2014–2015" per WP:DASH
- Children's book
- Like "live performances", this should also be its own section
- Analysis
- Five reviews doesn't seem like very much for a very well-known song that went viral online
- Popular culture
- This should be its own section
- I'd retitle this to "In popular culture"
- "This song appears in Just Dance 2015" is missing a citation, and I'd replace "this" with "the".
- References
- Dead links need fixing
- When available, each reference needs authors, names of works, page titles, and accessdates
- YouTube is discouraged as a source for potential copyright concerns. Additionally, the "Y" and "T" are capitalized in its name.
- Are "Mother Jones", "Gossip Cop", "Screen Junkies", "hkclubbing.com", "4Music", or "MelOn" reliable?
- I'm not convinced "The Daily Beast", "The Lantern", "In The Mix", "Heavy.com", or "The Rock Father" are good sources
- "Toronto Sun", "Gigwise", TMZ, "London Evening Standard", Twitter, "The Huffington Post", and "On The Red Carpet" are not reliable
- "The Telgraph" should read The Daily Telegraph
- "The" is part of The A.V. Club's title
- Yahoo! shouldn't be italicized, and remove the "chart watch" bit from work/publisher field
- Overall
- Well-written?
- Prose quality:
Needs copyediting
- Manual of Style compliance:
Not exactly
- Prose quality:
- Verifiable?
- Reference layout:
Could be better
- Reliable sources:
Poor/questionable sources need replacing
- No original research:
Dead links make things harder to verify, and not everything is properly attributed
- Reference layout:
- Broad in coverage?
- Major aspects:
More reviews would benefit the article
- Focused:
No excess detail
- Major aspects:
- Neutral?:
Not exactly
- Stable?:
Looks good
- Illustrated, if possible, by images?
- Appropriate licensing:
No copyright infringements
- Relevance and captioning:
I'm not sure if File:The Fox (What Does the Fox Say?).ogg or File:Ylvis The Fox.jpg provide any benefit
- Appropriate licensing:
- Pass or Fail?:
Since there are too many problems right now (mainly with references), I'm failing this without putting it on hold. Hopefully this will help improve the article. Snuggums (talk / edits) 20:42, 31 May 2015 (UTC)