Talk:There's Got to Be a Way/GA1

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Reviewer: Cwmhiraeth (talk · contribs) 07:20, 27 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]

  • I propose to review this article and will make a detailed study of it shortly. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 07:20, 27 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • The section "Music video" does not have any citations. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 07:36, 27 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]
    • It's just a synopsis, and I don't need to provide sources in for that. I couldn't find any director/location sources or reviews. Bear in mind that this single was released 24 years ago, and only received release in the UK and it wasn't promoted.  — Calvin999 09:13, 27 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]
      • OK. I guess it's similar to a plot summary in a film or TV programme which does not require a citation. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 10:17, 27 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]
        • Yea, it's the same premise.  — Calvin999 10:19, 27 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]

First reading[edit]

  • "and was only one of four songs they composed to be included on the album." - This is unclear.
  • "... while Joe Franco performed the percussion, Vernon "Ice" Black on the guitar, and Rich Tancredo also on the keyboards." - The only verb here is "performed" and I think we need more verbs in the later phrases.
  • Wikilink "synth horn", keyboards, guitar,
  • "bridge" is wikilinked, but you could explain the term as well.
    • In music, it's a basic term. It's linked for anyone who wants to know more.  — Calvin999 11:09, 27 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The keyboards, bass and rhythm engineering" - what does this mean?
    • He was the engineer responsible for these elements.  — Calvin999 11:09, 27 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Carey poses the question of accepting each other and not resorting to war" - perhaps "Carey suggests we should be more tolerant of each other and not resort so readily to war".
  • "was being too political in her "in her brave, young, idealistic attack"" - too many "in her"s.
  • "she "deploys" of her best whistle notes of her career" - "of her best" does not seem right here, perhaps just use "the best".
  • "The accompanying music video beings with a a shot of an empty street" - two typos in this bit.
  • "an obese woman walking down the street" - Should be "walks" to agree with the other verbs in the sentence.
  • The two citations "Nickson 1998, pp. 29" and "Nickson 1998, pp. 35–38" need expansion.
If its a book we need a title, full author name, publisher etc. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 11:46, 27 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Added.  — Calvin999

GA criteria[edit]

  • The article is well written and complies with MOS guidelines on prose and grammar, structure and layout.
  • The article uses reliable third-party sources, and makes frequent citations to them. I do not believe it contains original research.
  • The article covers the main aspects of the subject and remains focussed.
  • The article is neutral.
  • The article has recently been expanded by the nominator and is stable.
  • The single image has a fair use rationale.
  • Final assessment - I am satisfied with the improvements made during the review and believe this article reaches the GA criteria. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:17, 27 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]
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