Talk:Thomas F. Bayard/GA1
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Reviewer: Seabuckthorn (talk · contribs) 12:16, 22 February 2014 (UTC)
Nominator: Coemgenus (talk)
Hi! My review for this article will be here shortly. --Seabuckthorn ♥ 12:16, 22 February 2014 (UTC)
1: Well-written
- a. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
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2: Verifiable with no original research
- a. Has an appropriate reference section:
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- b. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:
excellent (Thorough check on Google. Cross-checked with other FAs)
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5: Stable: No edit wars, etc: Yes
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I'm glad to see your work here. As per the above checklist, I do have some insights that I think will be useful in improving the article:
"By that time, Garfield had been assassinated and Arthur was president." (Can you provide inline citation?)- Done.
"After four years in private life, he returned to the diplomatic arena as Ambassador to the United Kingdom." ("as Ambassador" or "as an Ambassador"?)- I think "as Ambassador is correct in American English.
"Born in Delaware to a prominent family of that state, Bayard learned his politics from his father, James A. Bayard, Jr., who also served in the Senate." (or simply "learned politics"?)- Done.
"When Bayard's father retired from the Senate, Delaware elected his son to succeed him in 1869." (Can you rephrase it? For example: "In 1869, Delaware elected Bayard when his father retired from the Senate.")- It should be less awkward now.
"A Peace Democrat during the Civil War, Bayard spend his early years in the Senate in opposition to Republican policies, especially the Reconstruction of the defeated Confederacy." (spend or spent? Can you rephrase it? For example: "During his early years in the Senate, Bayard who was a Peace Democrat during the Civil War opposed Republican policies, especially the Reconstruction of the defeated Confederacy."?)- "Spend" was a typo. Fixed it.
"His conservatism extended to financial matters, as well, as he became known as a staunch supporter of the gold standard and an opponent of greenbacks and silver coinage, which he believed would cause inflation." (Can you rephrase it, "as well" is affecting the flow?)- I just removed "as well". The sentence works fine without it, so I shouldn't have written it in the first place.
"His conservatism made him popular in the South and with Eastern financial interests, but never popular enough to obtain the Democratic nomination for President, which he attempted to win in 1876, 1880, and 1884." (Is "the" missing?)- No, neither of those would typically take a "the".
"In 1885, President Cleveland appointed Bayard Secretary of State." (Is "the" missing?)- Same as above; "the" isn't the normal construction.
I think the sentence "As ambassador, Bayard continued to strive for Anglo-American friendship, which brought him into conflict with his successor at the State Department, Richard Olney when Olney and Cleveland demanded more aggressive diplomatic overtures than Bayard wished in the Venezuela Crisis of 1895." can be broken into simpler sentences to make it easier to follow.- Yes, it works better as two sentences. Done.
I think the sentence "He protested the requirement that readmitted Southern states ratify the Fourteenth Amendment, which guaranteed equal protection of the laws to all Americans, and inveighed against the continued presence of federal troops in the South." can be broken into simpler sentences to make it easier to follow.- Yes, it would. Done.
Besides that, I think the article looks excellent. Coemgenus, please feel free to strike out any recommendation you think will not help in improving the article. All the best, --Seabuckthorn ♥ 23:19, 22 February 2014 (UTC)
- I think these are all addressed now. Thanks for the review! --Coemgenus (talk) 20:39, 23 February 2014 (UTC)
- Thanks, Coemgenus, very much for your diligence, care and precision in writing such great articles.
--Seabuckthorn ♥ 00:10, 24 February 2014 (UTC)
- Thanks, Coemgenus, very much for your diligence, care and precision in writing such great articles.
Promoting the article to GA status. --Seabuckthorn ♥ 00:10, 24 February 2014 (UTC)