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GA Review

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Reviewer: Cwmhiraeth (talk · contribs) 19:03, 29 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]


First reading

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Basically the article seems well written and pretty comprehensive. A few points that struck me -

  • "French zoologist Frédéric Cuvier. Cuvier " - Best not to have two Cuviers consecutively.
    • done
  • "the "perimyotine group". The perimyotine group was" - Again, this is a bit too repetitive.
    • done
  • "It has blond fur " - As you are starting a new section, you need a name here.
    • done
  • "They are seasonal breeders," - The same is true here. It is best as far as possible to either use singular or plural in discussing the bat, but not dodge back and forth.
    • fixed
  • "Young do not reach sexual maturity in their first fall; they do not breed until they are a year old." - I think "a year old" is unhelpful, perhaps use "their second fall" or somesuch.
    • revised phrasing
  • The "Behavior" section uses the word "roost" nine times.
    • Was able to remove one instance, though not sure further simplification is possible as this is the accurate term for both the noun and the verb
  • "human structures" - Maybe "buildings"
    • changed
  • In the "Diet and foraging" section, you have a mixture of singular and plural bats
    • fixed
  • "Predators, parasites, and disease" section starts with "Its" and there is more singular/plural alternation
    • fixed
  • "I wonder whether "Relationship to people" is a good section title?
    • I'm trying to have internal consistency with other bat GAs I've written in terms of section titles and order. #Relationship to people is also found in Pteropus, Indian flying fox, big brown bat, and little brown bat. Do you have a suggestion for an alternative? I would just want to make sure I changed it in other articles as well.
  • Looking back at the lead now to see whether it summarises the main text well, I see it mentions the former name "eastern pipistrelle", but this is not mentioned elsewhere
    • added to taxonomy section
  • The lead suffers from the singular/plural problem again.
    • fixed
  • Wikilink Echolocation, roost, gestation, taxon and any other less well-known terms
    • added

GA criteria

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  • The article is well written and complies with MOS guidelines on prose and grammar, structure and layout.
  • The article uses many reliable third-party sources, and makes frequent citations to them. I do not believe it contains original research.
  • The article covers the main aspects of the subject and remains focussed.
  • The article is neutral.
  • The article is stable.
  • The images are relevant and have suitable captions, and are properly licensed.