Talk:Tropical Storm Yun-yeung/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Nominator: OhHaiMark (talk · contribs) 16:35, 7 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 22:31, 30 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I thought I'd review this, since I have a few GAN's open.

First thing, make sure you have all units in metric and imperial, so km/h and mph in this case, not knots, which is used more by the scientific community.
How did the deaths happen?
Where did Yun-yeung make landfall?
Can you link low-pressure area and UTC?
Minor quibble, but did PAGASA really "upgrade", or did it designate the tropical depression?
You didn't go much into the storm's movement or development. The archives has advisories - check out the prognostic reports from JTWC. That will help you go into more detail about why the storm moved and developed the way it did.
On what basis was the estimated peak intensity?
The Impact section has a lot of "would..." verbiage. When you're describing a typhoon, you can say "the typhoon caused", not "the typhoon would cause".
What exact rainfall records were broken, and from when?
The numbering is a bit odd in the impact section when you spell it out. It should be "10,000 households", "32 flights"
I think you mention the train part in two different sections. You mention "Some train lines were impacted in the Kanto region" as well as "Additionally, rides in the Tokaido Line, Uchibo Line and Gaibo Line were temporarily suspended.". Can you put the train stuff together?
A minor quibble, but you don't write about any actual damage, so I'm left wondering how there was over $10 million in damage. Was that the flood in Shinjuku Station? I would expect roof damage, or maybe crop damage, or some kind of damage, and the article doesn't get into quite enough detail.

So that's my review. Please let me know if you have any questions, @OhHaiMark:. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 22:31, 30 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]