Talk:Tutta Bella Neapolitan Pizzeria

Peer Review for Interpersonal Media class

Hello, I think your article is off to a great start! One thing I will point out is the Citation or reference you used that links to Tutta Bella website. I learned from people who have been leaving me notes on Wikipedia that we cannot use a company's page for reference because it looks like awe are advertising for them. Also, do you work for this place? If so, I think we have to make a note somewhere on the Talk Page to say that? You can also check with Mako. Also, I think the first section can use more content other than the locations. Maybe consider merging the "History" part with the first section and that serve sort of as the "About" section? Just a thought. Otherwise, nice job! :) Elephant 16 (talk) 23:36, 24 October 2014 (UTC)

Hi I think the article is very informative. I'm surprised the chain didn't have their own page. I agree with Elephant16 above. Chat with Mako regarding your affiliation with the chain and if you can use it to reference the information. It seems like it would be ok but I would double check. How about adding some more information for each of the location like addresses and telephone numbers instead of just the neighborhoods. I would also want to see the menu be listed or some of their popular dishes. Maybe do a side bar information box like the way I have done it on my page for Asiana Flight 733. Check Olive Garden's restaurant page for an example as well. You can also possibly use the logo the way OG has done it. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Xxdboixx (talk • contribs) 04:05, 27 October 2014 (UTC)

Hello ElizavetaSouslova! When I saw your article, I got really excited because Tutta Bella Neapolitan Pizzeria is one of my favorite restaurants. Their pizza is amazing and they definitely deserve to have a Wikipedia article. I only go to the Crossroads location and I had no idea they had that many locations in Washington state. I like how you have separated the article into sections, such as purpose, history, menu, community and donations and recognition. It was interesting to learn more about Tutta Bella by reading your article. Thank you! Lap91 (talk) 08:22, 26 October 2014 (UTC)

Привет, Елизавета! I agree with all of the above, both the complements and the suggestions for improvement. I made edits to the page, mostly to improve the neutral tone and overall flow. To help further, you might want to check out the example of Pagliacci Pizza ... Mlaboda (talk) 14:05, 27 October 2014 (UTC)

HI @ElizavetaSouslova:

Very nice! It sounds like you have an insider's account of what goes on at Tutta Bella. Some of the content seems like it would be best left for their website, but the presidential visit and the Verace Pizza Napoletana certification are definitely worth mentioning. I would perhaps mention that they were the first pizza proprietors in Seattle to receive the certification (if you can find a reliable source for this), but perhaps you should leave out that they are the only ones to have this certification. Things may change in the future and I would not want your wiki to be inaccurate. Uclisa (talk) 05:55, 28 October 2014 (UTC)

Because ElizavetaSouslova switched topics without running this one by me, I had no idea about the connection to the subject before. As I've explained, conflicts of interest are always a concern with Wikipedia and are generally best to try and avoid. As Elephant 16 suggested, I've gone ahead and added a {{connected contributor}} tag to the top of the page to alert other people to the fact that you had a connection. It's not a badge of shame, so don't feel bad, (I've got similar tags on other pages in Wikipedia) but it is a useful signal to other Wikipedians to watch for things like neutrality.

The biggest concern with conflicts is that they might lead to other problems like an author not reporting noteworthy criticism or describing things without a neutral point of view. A lot of the comments left on this page have described clear ways to improve the article in terms of tone and neutrality. I've actually gone through and removed a bunch of the less neutral or encyclopedic content and tried to make a solid pass through to edit the article for tone. There are still lots of ways in which this article can be improved and more work on the text will really improve it. Hopefully the changes that I have others have made show the way forward. —mako๛ 22:04, 29 November 2014 (UTC)

some structure comments

Hey @ElizavetaSouslova: I just have a few comments on your article:

• It's not common to see a list of locations in the lead section of an article like this. For a subject like this, a single sentence that identifies the subject and the general location of the franchise should be sufficient. You can put the locations in a separate section or it may be reasonable to remove it entirely.
• We often won't include links to menus but if you want to you should take it out of the body of the article and move it to an external links section.
• Statements like "Tutta Bella brought one of their famous wood-fired ovens..." or "...Tiramisu made with a recipe that has been in Joe Fugere's family for generations." seem like they're more appropriate for a page run by the subject than an encyclopedia article. It can be hard to remain neutral while trying to write an article that feels interesting to a reader, but sticking to just the facts (or citing a specific source for a claim about famous ovens) will help you out a lot.
• You may want to trim down the summary of the Verace Pizza Napoletana and perhaps even add a "redlink" to it. Meaning just [[Verace Pizza Napoletana]], which renders as Verace Pizza Napoletana. That way a reader could be enticed to create a new article on the subject. Either way, I think you can probably trim it a bit to focus on the subject of the article and not an associated organization.

Thanks for your work! Adam (Wiki Ed) (talk) 20:55, 27 October 2014 (UTC)