Talk:Typhoon Bolaven (2012)/GA1

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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 16:08, 26 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

"All winds are in ten-minute sustained standards unless otherwise stated." - that's in the first note. Why do you have "standards" there? Is that word needed? Perhaps you should mention that is the wind speed of choice by the JMA?
- Added to note. Cyclonebiskit (talk) 17:29, 26 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Given that you say it was the strongest storm to hit the Korean Peninsula in (nearly) a decade, you should say how strong it was at landfall in the lede.
- Added measured gusts to the intro. Cyclonebiskit (talk) 17:29, 26 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Any status on the missing in North Korea?
- I've been periodically checking, but there's nothing on it. Cyclonebiskit (talk) 17:29, 26 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"On August 18, an area of showers and thunderstorms associated with trough about 520 km (320 mi) west-southwest of Guam." - that's not a complete sentence, and you should put "a" before trough.
- Well now...fixed Cyclonebiskit (talk) 17:29, 26 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"In light of the improved structure" - I don't think "in light" is the appropriate wording. "Due" would work fine. You use the same phrase later in the MH.
- Changed both instances. Cyclonebiskit (talk) 17:29, 26 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"By the morning of August 22, the typhoon was characterized by a large central dense overcast with extensive banding features to the south" - that's almost identical to a sentence you said a few lines before. I think it's redundant.
- Removed Cyclonebiskit (talk) 18:35, 26 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
" A second anticyclone developed over the center of Bolaven later that day and enhanced the cyclone's poleward outflow." - does this mean there were two anticyclones over a storm? Or was this to differentiate from the anticyclone that caused the shear? I'm assuming the latter, but can you confirm they were actually two separate anticyclones?
- Yes, it's a second, separate anticyclone as the wording suggests. Cyclonebiskit (talk) 18:35, 26 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"several additional feeder bands formed along the south side of the circulation." - this is the third time you mention outflow, or something, to the south :P
- Not sure what you want me to do here :P Cyclonebiskit (talk) 18:35, 26 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"atmospheric conditions became increasingly hostile towards tropical development" - is it still development after the storm had peaked? I think you could cut "toward tropical development"
- Removed the phrase. Cyclonebiskit (talk) 18:35, 26 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
You mention Typhoon Tembin for the first time in a brief sentence regarding Philippine impact, and yet they were active for much of the same time. Did they have any interaction? Fujiwhara?
- Looking into it now, I'll add some more info later (there are mentions of "binary interaction" that controlled Tembin's path but had little bearing on Bolaven) Cyclonebiskit (talk) 18:35, 26 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Bolaven basically didn't feel anything from Tembin, it just yanked it in a counter-clockwise loop. Added a sentence on it. Cyclonebiskit (talk) 19:45, 26 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"The majority cancellations were domestic flights" - put "of" in there
- Added Cyclonebiskit (talk) 19:52, 26 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Was there a reason damage wasn't as bad as expected in Okinawa?
- I can speculate with OR but I can't add it in :P Cyclonebiskit (talk) 19:52, 26 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"The first area in South Korea impacted by Typhoon Bolaven was Jeju Island." - given this starts the new paragraph, maybe just detail it a bit by saying the island is offshore the southwestern portion of the country?
- Added Cyclonebiskit (talk) 19:52, 26 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"Throughout the country, at least 19 people were killed by the storm and hundreds were evacuated" - this sentence seems unusual, linking deaths with evacuations.
- Split the sentence Cyclonebiskit (talk) 19:57, 26 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"Agriculture as a whole suffered significant from the storm" - missing word? Or should that be "significantly"
- Fixed Cyclonebiskit (talk) 19:57, 26 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
In the South Korea section, are losses the same as actual damage? Or does it refer to economic losses too?
- Doesn't specify, so I left it at losses to not be factually incorrect. Cyclonebiskit (talk) 19:57, 26 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

All in all, a good read. These should all be pretty easy to fix. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 16:08, 26 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]