Talk:Typhoon Irma (1981)
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More organization and info. Hurricanehink (talk) 16:19, 8 June 2006 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 22:25, 8 May 2014 (UTC)
- I'm gonna have to call shenanigans for the first sentence. It was only a C2. Betty in the previous year was a C3 at Philippine landfall.
- "The twenty-fifth named storm, fourteenth typhoon, and second super typhoon of the near-average 1981 Pacific typhoon season" - this is a long beginning to the sentence. I'd cut "near average"
- "Irma reached its peak wind speed of 205 km/h (125 mph)" - so this is per JMA, right? If so, you should clarify, as the mention of "super typhoon" earlier implies it uses JTWC winds.
- What is Malia, linked in the lede? There is no mention of Philippines there. Do you mean Manila?
- "Nearly 40,000 people were homeless. Irma destroyed or damaged 119,233 dwellings." - these are too short and choppy. Try merging.
- "150th meridian east and the 170th meridian east" - why do you mention the longitude? That means nothing to most people.
- "After passing north of Guam, both agencies upgraded Irma into a tropical storm." - the agencies passed north of Guam?
- "Thereafter, Irma turned east as a subtropical ridge built north and northwest of the storm" - the track doesn't suggest this.
- "and the later reporting winds" - I think you mean "latter"
- "as Irma neared landfall" - there a reason why this sentence begins lowercase?
- "Virtually every house was demolished due to storm surge in Benagaspasan,[13] a small town with a population 1,000.[14] A total of 47 killed in the village. Thirty-seven were injured in Bengaspasan as well." - I feel like these three sentences could be killed.
- "One army officer noted that died via electrocution while trying to fix the roof of his dwelling[19] in Makati." - poor grammar here, not sure what's going on.
- The pic in the impact section should be right-aligned to alternate with the storm path map.
- I kinda feel like Death by coconut should be linked here - "...and a farmer in Quezon died after being hit by a falling coconut."
- Does flooding really have to be linked?
- "The majority of huts were flattened." - where?
- "sustained little damaged" - grammar
- "Seventy-two others were wounded." - I don't get why this is placed where it is. Why not put it where you mention the deaths?
- "The decaying remnants of Irma then 105 to 150 mm (5 to 5 in) of rain and winds of up to 72 km/h (45 mph) to Okinawa." - missing verb
All in all, a decent article, but there are some issues. Lemme know when you take care of these. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 22:25, 8 May 2014 (UTC)
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