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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 06:45, 11 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]


Will do this one. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 06:45, 11 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

This article is in good shape. I have a few comments:

  • in the lead, link mobilisation as it is a bit jargony
    • Ha, I remembered to do that on Washington but not this one.
  • also in the lead, perhaps mention that she was on the east coast before the war, a bit of assumed knowledge
    • Good idea
  • also in the lead, link ship commissioning for decommissioned
    • Done
  • suggest "which added a restriction on her main battery of guns that they be no larger than 14 inches (360 mm)"
    • Works for me
  • comma after ""standard" series"
    • I don't think one is needed there - there are only two things being considered in that sentence - standard type battleships or fast battleships
  • the horsepower is shp in the body and just hp in the infobox
    • Fixed
  • not sure what to do about the crew numbers, don't we use s designed in the infobox, therefore 1,800?
    • Good catch
  • the conversion for the 16 in guns varies from 410 mm to 406 mm
    • Fixed
  • also, I'm not sure about the use of 16", should perhaps be 16 in?
    • Good idea
  • no conversion of 5 in in the body?
    • Added
  • the caliber of the 1.1 in guns isn't provided in the body
    • Removed from the box
  • "South Dakota class" is a dab
    • Good catch
  • "more advanced Mark 8 sets"
    • Fixed
  • with the replacement AA guns, it switches to metric first, which jars a bit
    • Yeah, but that's how they were designated - nobody calls them 0.79" Oerlikons
  • suggest "By June 1943, her anti-aircraft armament washad been increased"
    • Good catch
  • consistency with hyphenation "twin-mounts and twenty single mounts"
    • Fixed
  • "The keel for North Carolina was laid down on 27 October 1937 at the New York Naval Shipyard on 27 October 1937"
    • Whoops
  • "tThe Navy briefly considered"
    • Fixed
  • "a combination fromof rapid maneuvering"
    • Fixed
  • there is a bit of assumed knowledge about what sort of ships Indiana and Massachusetts were
    • Added a descriptor to the first reference to Indiana, but don't you think saying the battleship group consisted of this one and two other names should be fairly explicit?
  • "The ships to bombarded the island of Nauru"
    • Must've gotten rewritten too many times
  • once you use TF, go with it throughout
    • Fixed
  • "In the course of the battle, North Carolina shot down two Japanese aircraft during the battle"
    • Fied
  • link Tinian
    • Done
  • suggest "to hit targets ion Kyushu"
    • Done
  • "and the Ryukus continued after the landing on Okinawa"
    • Fixed
  • suggest "the fast carrier task force washad been transferred back to Third Fleet"
    • Fixed
  • "by a group of nine tugboats"
    • Whoops
  • suggest "Work to maintain the ship and improve the facility areis an on-going efforts"
    • Works for me
  • all the image licensing looks fine.

That's me done. Placing on hold for the above to be addressed. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 08:03, 11 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks PM! Parsecboy (talk) 11:59, 13 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]
This article is well-written, verifiable using reliable sources, covers the subject well, is neutral and stable, contains no plagiarism, and is illustrated by appropriately licensed images with appropriate captions. Passing. Nice work! Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 00:48, 14 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]
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