Talk:Unfaithful (song)/GA1

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Reviewer: Jivesh boodhun (talk · contribs) 12:58, 23 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

Generally well written. I did some minor tweaks. Jivesh1205 (Talk) 12:14, 24 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox

Link both Tor Erik Hermansen, Mikkel S. Eriksen under Stargate and unlink the producer.
Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Background and release

by American singer and songwriter - already in lead
Removed— Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
which Ne-Yo also wrote - remove also
Removed— Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
The song was produced by Stargate[4] and recorded at Battery and Avatar Studios in New York City, Loft Recording Studios in Bronxville and Digital Insight Recording Studios in Las Vegas.[5] The song was mixed by Phil Tan and Makeba Ridick provided vocal production.[5] - Close repetition of The song

Changed— Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

The song was released as the second single from A Girl like Me, only after the US number-one single "SOS". The song was released to digital outlets in Canada on June 20. 2006.[6] - Again

Changed— Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Overall: It's good at GA level but if yo want to take it to FA (it has got potential), you will need to paraphrase the quotes. Jivesh1205 (Talk) 12:14, 24 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I will think about it, but its a good idea. — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Music and lyrics

According to the sheet music published by Universal Music Publishing Group at Musicnotes.com, it is composed in the key of G minor and set in common time with a slow feeling groove. - was composed + link key, common time and groove
Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
from the low note of F3 to C5 - from the low note of F3 to the high note of C5
Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
by the works - work
Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
In the beginning, the song's structure built around piano as the only instrument; the percussion and strings was added late - Something is missing.

was, right?— Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

According to Brandee J. Tecson of MTV - MTV or MTV News?
Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Unlink ballad
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In an interview with MTV - In an interview for the same publication

Changed— Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

"we - "We

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In another interview with NewsDay - for

Changed — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Quentin B. Huff of PopMatters criticized the song's lyrics and described them as well-intentioned but "overboard with melodrama" and "devoid of remorse".[12] Regarding Rihanna's vocals in the song, Bill Lamb of About.com commented that they are not particularly strong and in places sound thin and reedy.[17] - Won't this fit in reception?

I removed Bill Lamb's part. But I think Quentin one should stay, because he comments on the lyrics. Can you re-format the first sentence? — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Reception and accolades

In a review of A Girl like Me - Unnecessary
Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
While reviewing the single - Again
Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
, in a review of the album, - Same
Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Celia San Miguel from Vibe magazine, in a review of the album, praised "Unfaithful" and the other ballads on it, stating that the ballads give Rihanna a "new found charisma, solid vocal range and her ability to channel deep-rooted emotions with ease". - Celia San Miguel from Vibe magazine praised "Unfaithful", stating that it gives Rihanna a "new found charisma, solid vocal range and her ability to channel deep-rooted emotions with ease".
Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Why is Billboard not lined?
Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
A reviewer from Billboard magazine likened the song to Beyoncé Knowles' works and concluded that the song reveals Rihanna as a "young vocalist growing into her own" - Repetitive use of the words the song + work should be singular
Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Knowles's - I see an extra "s"
Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
In 2011, Billboard - Billboard magazine for consistency
Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
at number nine on its list of the Top 10 Singles of the Year - which year?
Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Top 100 Pop Songs of 2006 commenting "It's all about that one word...murderer." - Top 100 Pop Songs of 2006, commenting, "It's all about that one word...murderer."
Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Chart performance

Never start with The song
Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
in the United States. - US
Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
If you say US Hot Dance Club Songs chart - then also put chart after the Hot 100 one
Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
were sold - Not sold but shipped
Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
The next week - The next week,
Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
by International Federation of the Phonographic Industry - by the International Federation of the Phonographic Industry (IFPI)
Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Again, not selling but shipping
Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
on July 22, 2006 and the next week - on July 22, 2006, and the next week,
Done — Tomica (talk) 13:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Music video

Good. Jivesh1205 (Talk) 12:05, 26 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Live performances

I can't at that wig :P
where she won the award for Best R&B Act - Necessary?
I did some tweaks here and in he video section as well.
Consider reading this section and remove unnecessary details. The prose is in fact good but this section is over-detailed. We do not need to know about so many other songs. Jivesh1205 (Talk) 12:05, 26 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done — Tomica (talk) 15:40, 26 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Other sections look good. Jivesh1205 (Talk) 12: 15, 26 January 2012 (UTC)

References

FN 16 Use cite news and publisher should be Cablevision
FN 17 Link The New York Times Company
FN 19 Unlink The New York Times Company
FN 21 Use cite web
FN 22 Link The Washington Post Company
FN 24 Link Buzz Media
FN 35. Jam! should not be in italics. The publisher is Sun Media
FN 69. Check for consistency
FN 71. Spot the error
FN 73 Link Penticton Herald
FN 75 You will now have to unlink Sun Media
FN 76 publisher is The Star Tribune Company
FN 84 Is the formatting correct?

Jivesh1205 (Talk) 12:28, 26 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done — Tomica (talk) 15:40, 26 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

As it stands now

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Jivesh1205 (Talk) 12:28, 26 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Passing now. Jivesh1205 (Talk) 15:44, 26 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]