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GA Review

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Reviewer: The Most Comfortable Chair (talk · contribs) 05:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Hello. I will have the review shortly. Thank you. — The Most Comfortable Chair 05:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

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Overview

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  • "The Victorian Age: Vampire rulebook does not contain complete rules, and as such the game requires another rulebook from the series, such as Vampire: The Masquerade Revised Edition or Dark Ages: Vampire, to be played." — "to be played" hangs out a little awkwardly at the end. Consider removing it or writing it earlier, such as → "The Victorian Age: Vampire rulebook does not contain complete rules, and as such the game requires another rulebook from the series to be played, such as Vampire: The Masquerade Revised Edition or Dark Ages: Vampire."
  • "While the series until then had largely been written from an American perspective," → "While the series had largely been written from an American perspective until then," — Reads a bit more smoothly.
  • "form of 2003's Kindred of the Ebony Kingdom." → "form of Kindred of the Ebony Kingdom in 2003." — To make it sound more formal.
  • "social reform" — If there are any particular issues it focuses on, mention that instead.
  • "supported it with two supplements." — Could their contents be mentioned briefly?
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  • "A trilogy of novelizations was written by Philippe Boulle, consisting of 2002's A Morbid Initiation and 2003's The Madness of Priests and The Wounded King." → "A trilogy of novelizations was written by Philippe Boulle, consisting of A Morbid Initiation (2002), The Madness of Priests and The Wounded King (2003)." or "A trilogy of novelizations was written by Philippe Boulle, consisting of A Morbid Initiation in 2002, and The Madness of Priests and The Wounded King in 2003."

That should be all for now. It is compact and written well, and it should pass. Thank you. — The Most Comfortable Chair 18:38, 19 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@The Most Comfortable Chair: Thank you for the review! I have implemented your suggestions, with one exception, which I left a comment for above.--AlexandraIDV 23:29, 19 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Final

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GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:
    The article is concise and flows really well. It is as interesting as the game, and meets the criteria. Thank you for all everyone's efforts! — The Most Comfortable Chair 03:30, 20 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]