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GA Review

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Reviewer: Arsenikk (talk) 10:40, 29 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]


Comments

I've looked down to, but not including, 'future'. In general the contents and referencing look fine, but the prose needs some tweaking. I'm placing on hold and will do the rest of the review later. Arsenikk (talk) 10:40, 29 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I see nothing has been done with these issues since the initial part of the review. I would appreciate that these issues be seen to first, as an intention from the nominee to follow up the review, as I spend quite a lot of time on this sort of reviewing, and I have previously done similar reviews with zero feedback (thus I have been wasting my time). Once these issues are seen to, I'll be more than happy to continue the review. Arsenikk (talk) 17:17, 2 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Hello, I just wanna say that I was a major contributor to the article, which was expanded last year. Since then, my writing has improved a lot, and I do realise some of the mistakes in the article were because of my infancy on the site. Sorry Jet for creating so much work for you, but if you need help on anything, I'd be happy to help (it'd better be about aviation, though). Sp33dyphil "Ad astra" 23:13, 3 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
No problem buddy. Please note that I'm not going to make major modifications to the article, but only to address the issues raised by the reviewer. I'll be contacting you as soon as I need help. Regards.--Jetstreamer (talk) 23:35, 3 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Additional comments

place, and spend more prose discussing the actual network. Arsenikk (talk) 22:20, 9 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Further comments
  • Similarly, the 'modernization' section is largely historic information
  • The fleet section should in general be a rather spartan section, with a table overview of the current, future and past fleet. It can include some prose used to describe the status quo.
  • Are the aircraft in the cargo fleet pure freight aircraft, or are the just passenger aircraft? Do the numbers include the figures in the main fleet list.
  • There is quite a need for a copyedit here, but I am presuming most of it will be stripped, so I will not comment on it.
  • The statement "retiring and scrapping the unreliable Soviet made planes, because they were involved in all of the airline’s crashes." must reference from reliable sources that the reason for retiring the Soviet aircraft was because they were involved in the accidents (and not other reasons, such as operating costs etc).
  • The section on services can be tightened. Remember, we are neither a travel guide nor the PR department of VA, so just stick to the basics and avoid unnecessary detail. Seat pitches are fine, but details as to how long flights give what type of meals is a bit over the edge. Remember to reference everything and to consequently put metric values first.
  • The accident and incident section needs to be longer, and it needs references. As least give a brief summary of the three lethal accidents.
  • Avoid "in the last 22 years", as in a year, well, it will be in the last 23 years, etc. Who knows how long ago that was written
  • "All fatal incidents have involved Soviet made aircraft that have since been phased out of service." is simply POV and marketing talk. If a summary of all three incidents were given, it would be unnecessary to state.
  • All links found elsewhere in the article should not be in the 'see also' section. If an article is not worth mentioning in the text, it is very seldom that it is worthy of inclusion in the see also section.
  • 'Footnotes' should be 'References', with a separate section for 'Notes'.
  • References should be in start case, not all-caps, even if the source uses all-caps
  • Some of the references are a bit weirdly formatted, such as "Flight International (Hanoi)". I do not think Flight International is published in Hanoi. Similarly "ThanhNien News (Vietnam: ThanhNien News)"—why is ThanhNien News repeated?
  • Several refs lack author/publishers, and one lacks accessdates

The stuff which had been copyedited is looking good. Should be ready to pass after this is seen to. Arsenikk (talk) 20:47, 23 October 2011 (UTC) I'm going to pass the article, as it is past the GA criteria. There still is a bit more that could be done, including some style and MOS issues, but these could be regarded as beyond the GA criteria. Arsenikk (talk) 13:56, 29 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

New chairman

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Pham Viet Thanh is currently the Chairman of Vietnam Airlines [1]. He took office from June 1, 2011.123.23.183.200 (talk) 15:35, 14 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]