Talk:Viktoria Orsi Toth

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Review: March 10, 2019. (Reviewed version).

A fact from Viktoria Orsi Toth appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the Did you know column on 5 March 2019 (check views). The text of the entry was as follows:

Did you know... that Italian beach volleyball player Viktoria Orsi Toth did not like her sport at first, describing it as "some kind of a daily torture"?

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GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 20:32, 8 March 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Going to review this one. MWright96 (talk) 20:32, 8 March 2019 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Early and personal life[edit]

"Orsi Toth played various sports including swimming," - add a wikilink for swimming to Swimming (sport)
"However, she hated running" - how about detested?
"She picked up indoor volleyball" - took up
"Orsi Toth credits Sirressi with making her fall in love with indoor volleyball," - become attracted to

Club[edit]

"She moved up from the youth leagues" - advanced

2011–2012: World Tour debut[edit]

"Orsi Toth concluded her first season on the World Tour ranked No. 89" - use the abbr template on No. to say that it means number
Wikilink forfeit to Forfeit (sports)

2013: Partnering with Menegatti[edit]

"Her breakthrough came mid-2013," - midway through 2013
"when national team coach Carvalho decided to split Cicolari and Menegatti" - when the national team coach decided to separate
"and paired Menegatti up with Orsi Toth instead." - just having paired Menegatti is sufficient
"With only five international events under their belt," - try not to use Idioms per MOS:IDIOM

2014–2015: First World Tour title[edit]

"Their results picked up in September" - got better

2018–present: Comeback[edit]

"In the group stage, they upset second-seeded" - they upset the
"and 15th-seeded Nina Betschart and Tanja Huberli of Switzerland" - and the 15th-seeded

Style of play[edit]

"and' right-handed right-side player." - and a
"and said that Orsi Toth keeps her grounded." - I am not so sure what is meant by the text in bold. Please clarify.

References[edit]

No dead links

Overall, a neatly written article that enabled me to learn a lot from this individaul. Not too many issues to be addressed. MWright96 (talk) 15:34, 10 March 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@MWright96: Thank you for this thorough review. I think I've adequately addressed all your points save for the last one in the style of play section. In the cited source, Menegatti essentially says that Orsi Toth's down-to-earth demeanor has rubbed off on her ("E lei sdrammatizza, mi fa volare bassa"). I've rewritten that part to say: "and said that Orsi Toth's down-to-earth demeanor keeps her grounded as well", with "grounded" here meant as a synonym for "down-to-earth". Is the new text better? Or do you have any suggestions for how this can be better phrased? Thanks again. Bennv3771 (talk) 16:39, 10 March 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@Bennv3771: Having review the new text, am happy that it is satisfactory. Can now promote to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 20:45, 10 March 2019 (UTC)[reply]