Talk:Wallace (song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) 21:43, 28 August 2015 (UTC)

• For the producer parameter, just include their surnames, no need to type in full again.

Done. Azealia911 _talk

• Banks isn't a label.

She's credited as a label with Prospect Park here. Azealia911 _talk

• Broke with Expensive Taste track listing → I don't see the point of including this. These links can be found in the template for Banks a the bottom anyway.

I disagree, it's a quick way of seeing where on the album the track is without moving onto the album's article. You also saw no problem with it the last time you reviewed a song from the same album which included the template? Azealia911 _talk

• • • To be honest I didn't notice it. But to have a template with 16 songs when only 6 have articles is not helpful and duplicates Bank's template.  — Calvin999 05:26, 29 August 2015 (UTC)

Removed. Azealia911 _talk

• The song was released on November 7, 2014, along with the rest of the album, → It wasn't released as a single, so it's misleading to say that it was released on the day of the album release.

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• "pounding" and "half-sung" with Banks "float[ing] between islandy R&B and rapid-fire, corner-side spitting". → What makes these quotes so special to include in the lead? Quotations in the lead require citations, and citations shouldn't really be in the lead. I suggest paraphrasing into your own words.

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• deeming the song as a standout cut from the album. → with many deeming it as an album highlight.

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• To promote Broke with Expensive Taste, Banks released a music video for "Wallace". → It's not promoting the album...

Why else would an artist release promotional materials for songs without their own album singles on digital purchasing platforms? Of course it's promoting the album, singles promote albums, concerts promote albums, music videos promote albums. Almost everything done around the time of an albums release is to promote the album, it's a promotional campaign after all. Azealia911 _talk

• • • A music video promotes a single, not an album. It's the "To promote Broke with Expensive Taste," part I have an issue with.  — Calvin999 05:26, 29 August 2015 (UTC)

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• The video was released on March 11, 2015, → Irrelevant info for the lead

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• "Wallace" is a three minute and fifty second long hip hop song, → "Wallace" is a hip hop song that lasts for a duration of three minute and fifty seconds
• a pounding beat. → Pounding is quoted in the lead?

I'm not sure what you're saying here. Azealia911 _talk

• • • You've presented it as a quote in the lead, indicating a critic said it, but here it's like your own word.  — Calvin999 05:26, 29 August 2015 (UTC)

I see what you mean now, added quotation marks and ref. Azealia911 _talk

• The genres haven't got a citation so can you provide me with the link please.

Which instance would this be referring to? Azealia911 _talk

• Banks revealed that she first revived the instrumental for the song in 2007, → I think this needs rewording. If she used it for the first time in 2007, then doesn't that make Wallace a revival?

Revived was a typo, received was the proper wording, hopefully it makes sense now. Azealia911 _talk

• In 2011, it was reported that Banks was working on a studio album with British producer Paul Epworth despite not having signed to a record label at that time.[5] → This is completely irrelevant and has no bearing on this article

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• Approximately a year later → You don't need approximately

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• from the labels; → Not needed

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• Hardeep Phull of →Hardeep Phull of the

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• On April 6, 2014, Banks uploaded two clips from the shooting to her Instagram account.[15] On March 10, 2015, a 25-second teaser for "Wallace" was uploaded on Banks' YouTube channel.[17] The full video was released on March 11, 2015, via Banks' official website.[18] → Boring flow and no connection from one sentence to the other. Like a list of facts.

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• from the prior year. → from 2014

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• midst controversy concerning Nicki Minaj and Taylor Swift centered around the fairness of the MTV Video Music Award nominees selection process, → Reads awkwardly

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• Ref three has a double "" in the title. Use ' instead for titles

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• External links: Provide a link to the video on Youtube?

It was never released onto YouTube. Azealia911 _talk

Outcome

On hold.  — Calvin999 21:56, 28 August 2015 (UTC)

• Eurofan, just in case you see this, please don't start addressing these comments, I'll have them all done within thirty minutes (just to avoid frustrating edit conflicts) Azealia911 _talk 22:05, 28 August 2015 (UTC)

Thanks for the review. Azealia911 _talk 22:25, 28 August 2015 (UTC)

Well done. Passing.  — Calvin999 16:58, 29 August 2015 (UTC)

Cheers Azealia911 _talk 17:00, 29 August 2015 (UTC)