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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 16:11, 7 July 2015 (UTC)
I'll have this done as soon as I can JAGUAR 16:11, 7 July 2015 (UTC)
Initial comments
[edit]- "It remains an important road and is marked with bus lanes, with limited parking" - what makes this any different from almost every road in Central London that has too many bus lanes and no parking!
- Hmmm. Wonder what should we write instead. In this case, TFL considers it important to mention the bus lanes and lack of parking, and other sources do. I think it's because somebody visiting might expect parking near the market or something? :-/ Ritchie333 (talk) (cont) 16:30, 7 July 2015 (UTC)
- True, I think it's OK to leave it as it is, especially if sources consider the two things important here! JAGUAR 16:50, 7 July 2015 (UTC)
- Hmmm. Wonder what should we write instead. In this case, TFL considers it important to mention the bus lanes and lack of parking, and other sources do. I think it's because somebody visiting might expect parking near the market or something? :-/ Ritchie333 (talk) (cont) 16:30, 7 July 2015 (UTC)
- "to Venta Icenorum (Caistor St Edmund near Norfolk)" - it has to be in Norfolk, so I would re-word this to either in Norfolk or near Norwich?
- D'oh - fixed! Ritchie333 (talk) (cont) 16:30, 7 July 2015 (UTC)
- "The school expanded with a new hall and classrooms, with further improvements in 1909" - did al of the expansions take place in 1909? If so the sentence needs to be restructured
- I forgot to transcribe a date from the source - fixed Ritchie333 (talk) (cont) 18:00, 7 July 2015 (UTC)
- "Just to the east of the market are almshouses at Trinity House" - I would link almshouse for accessibility
- "a police raid uncovered unlicensed horse and dog race betting, arresting the club's owner and 21 patrons" - might sound better as a police raid uncovered unlicensed horse and dog race betting, resulting in the arrest of the club's owner and 21 patrons
- I went with "which led to the arrest of" Ritchie333 (talk) (cont) 18:00, 7 July 2015 (UTC)
- "landlord of the Blind Beggar" - this is the first mention of the Blind Beggar, so should the pub be linked here?
- Done (that's what happens when you expand articles backwards!) Ritchie333 (talk) (cont) 18:00, 7 July 2015 (UTC)
- "On 4 October 1936, British Union of Fascists Oswald Mosley" - might be worth changed it to "British Union of Fascists leader'/founder Oswald Mosley"
- Added "leader" Ritchie333 (talk) (cont) 18:00, 7 July 2015 (UTC)
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[edit]On hold
[edit]That's all I could find with this article, a short review but the overall it is compact and well written. Once they're all addressed then this should have no problem passing! JAGUAR 16:49, 7 July 2015 (UTC)
- @Jaguar: I've addressed the above issues. I've also done a proper proof-read now and fixed a few other things. Biggest howlers were not actually correctly citing St Mary's (Whitechapel Road)'s destruction in 1940 and getting the Whitechapel Murder victim's name wrong (though I think this is the source's fault, unlike many articles I'll assume Whitechapel Murders is correct as it's an FA). Ritchie333 (talk) (cont) 18:02, 7 July 2015 (UTC)
- Thanks for addressing all of them! The article looks great now and meets the GA criteria. I didn't spot the St Mary's destruction source, but I was happy with the state of the prose at the time. I look forward to reviewing any more Monopoly squares if need be
JAGUAR 20:19, 7 July 2015 (UTC)
- Thanks for addressing all of them! The article looks great now and meets the GA criteria. I didn't spot the St Mary's destruction source, but I was happy with the state of the prose at the time. I look forward to reviewing any more Monopoly squares if need be