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Copyediting Queries

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History

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Women in Pre-Modern Italy

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  • The following sentence in the second paragraph should be revised for clarity. Below is a possible revision (but only if the meaning is still correct):
“Venetian-born Christine de Pizan wrote The City of Ladies in 1404, and in it she described women's gender as having no innate inferiority to men's, although women were still considered to have been being born to serve the other sex.
  • The last sentence in the fourth paragraph may need to be revised for accuracy. It appears to conflict with the information stated on the Elena Cornaro Piscopia article on Wikipedia:
“…who was one of the first women to receive an academic degree from a university and in 1678 she became the first woman in the world to receive a Ph.D. degree.” (from the lead of the Elena Cornaro Piscopia article)
Would she not have earned a bachelor’s degree first, and then a Ph.D.?

Under the Fascist regime (1925–1945)

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  • I was unable to copyedit this section and have tagged it as needing to be reviewed by an expert.

Issues in present time

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Work

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Please, before writing false information without quoting, get informed. It is not true that women in Italy lose their job because of pregnancy, as there have been a law since 2001 who protects women by this. The majority of the women who have got kids deliberately leave their job to take care of them. Also, the blank dimission is here presented as something which affect women specifically. Instead this practice, which is forbidden by law, used to be done for all the employers, regardless their sex.

Work

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  • I recommend moving the third and fourth sentences in this section to the “Violence against women” section. I’m not sure if reference number 22 needs to be applied to this text, so I have not moved the sentences myself.
  • Near the beginning of this section, “the parliament” is mentioned. I recommend adding some clarifying text to explain what or which parliament is being referred to.
  • This phrase appears near the end of the section:
“…so that she "resigns" at that date.”
It appears that the quotation marks around “resigns” are meant to show irony. I don’t believe this keeps with Wikipedia’s preference for an encyclopedic tone. Perhaps it could be rewritten as “…so that she can be fired (although it appears that she has only resigned).

Culture and society

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  • The last phrase in the first paragraph will need to be rewritten for clarity. It’s a little difficult to understand what’s being said. I have not altered it, as I do not want to inadvertently change its meaning.
“…also reflected in the fact of a higher-than-EU average female unemployment.”

References

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The references listed in this section will need to be cleaned up. Many of the references contain limited information on the sources being cited, most of the online sources do not have a retrieved date applied to them, and references 9, 10, and 21 are the same.

It was a pleasure to work on this article. I am going to contact WP:ITALY and request for them to perform an edit to the "Under the Fascist regime" section. If necessary, I can be reached at my talk page. David Thibault (talk) 03:54, 1 September 2017 (UTC)[reply]