Talk:Worry About You (Ivy song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 04:40, 16 September 2016 (UTC)

Soon... Cartoon network freak (talk) 04:40, 16 September 2016 (UTC)

Lead

• remove "indie rock" from "indie rock band"
• band Ivy. It was released from their third studio album → band Ivy for their third studio album
• the rest of the album → its parent record
• 2001 by → 2001 through
• The release → The release of "Worry About You"
• 2x release in the same sentence; fix
• Add year or release to the two singles in brackets
• was handled by → was solely handled by
• noted by several → remove "by several"
• being released → being made available (trying to avoid word repetition)
• well known → well-known
• after appearing as → after being used as

Composition

• was handled by → was solely handled
• "Worry About You" is Ivy's → "Worry About You" marks Ivy's furthest
• stating it → stating that it
• It was released in the United States to the iTunes Store along with the rest of Long Distance on July 10, 2001, but as an "album-only" track, meaning that one must purchase the album in order to have the song.[5] In Japan, the song was released alongside the parent album on November 8, 2000 → The recording was failed to be released as a stand-alone single, but was made available for purchase through iTunes Store in the United States and Japan on July 10, 2001 and November 8, 2000, respectively, together with its parent album, Long Distance (2000).

Reception and promotion

• change in sound → change of artistry
• works of Portishead → works of English band Potishead
• also positive → also positive towards "Worry About You"
• the song also → the recording also (due to word repetition)
• soundtrack for the → soundtrack of the
• You may combine the two paragraphs into one

Credits and personnel

• from Long Distance liner notes → from the liner notes of Long Distance
• Maybe it will be useful to do a "Release history" section, something like I used in this article.

References

• Ref #8 seems to be dead

• Better ref added. Carbrera (talk) 01:56, 17 September 2016 (UTC)

• Ref #9 seems to change its path

• I experimented with it and it seems to be working just fine. Carbrera (talk) 01:56, 17 September 2016 (UTC)

Outcome

Also if the article seems a little bit short, I've put this  On hold in order to allow you to make changes to the article. Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 23:47, 16 September 2016 (UTC)

@Cartoon network freak: Also done! Thanks for your very thorough review! Carbrera (talk) 01:56, 17 September 2016 (UTC)

Passing! Cartoon network freak (talk) 04:43, 17 September 2016 (UTC)

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