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Reviewer: Kyle Peake (talk · contribs) 11:58, 12 June 2020 (UTC)
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Oldest GA in the songs category so I will get through this one --Kyle Peake (talk) 11:58, 12 June 2020 (UTC)
Infobox and lead
[edit]- Remove streaming since that is not sourced in the body
- I will mention and source it within the body so that this can stay.
- Length should be 2:36 instead
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- Are you sure busbee isn't credited under his real name? If so, add under Writer(s) as Michael Busbee with the target to busbee still
- Per the liner notes to YMIFLC, "BUSBEE" is credited as a writer and "busbee" is credited as a producer, not Michael Busbee.
- Busbee → busbee under Producer(s) since his name is not capitalised
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- Link to the video in infobox instead of External links
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- "for her 2017 holiday album of the same name" → "from her fourth studio album of the same name (2017)"
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- "The track was written by" → "The song was written by"
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- "was handled by Busbee" → "was handled by busbee"
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- "Recorded during the summer months, the song title leaked" → "It was recorded during the summer months, with the title leaking"
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- "August 2017 and was eventually released" → "August 2017 and the song was eventually released"
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- "digital consumption by Interscope" → "digital download as the lead single from the album by Interscope" with the appropriate targets
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- "The single was influenced by" → "The song was influenced by"
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- You should mention that Blake Shelton is featured + background on it for the second/third sentence of this para instead, but keep the holiday music sentence here though
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- "A Christmas song, "You Make It Feel Like Christmas" has" → "A Christmas track, the song includes"
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- "elements with lyrics describing" → "elements, with lyrics describing"
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- "received a positive to mixed response from" → "received positive to mixed reviews from"
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- Target music critics to Music journalism
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- "believed that the track was successful lyrically" → "believed that the song was successful lyrically"
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- "and would eventually" → "and would ultimately"
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- "a modern Christmas classic while others" → "a modern Christmas classic, while other critics" with the appropriate wikilink
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- "the song missed entering the" → "the song failed to enter the"
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- "It hit the top ten on both Canada and the United States' Adult Contemporary charts." → "It reached the top 10 of the Adult Contemporary charts for both Canada and the US."
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- "In countries like" → "In countries such as"
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- "it became Stefani's first entry" → "the song became Stefani's first track to chart"
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- "In the United Kingdom" → "On the UK Singles Chart" with the wikilink
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- "has sold 66,000 copies as of 2019" → "has sold 66,000 copies by 2019"
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- "The song's accompanying music video was directed by long-time collaborator" → "The accompanying music video was directed by long-time Stefani collaborator" with the wikilink
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- "with ones of them performing the song" → "with ones of the two performing "You Make It Feel Like Christmas""
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- "performing the song accompanied by" → "performing the song, accompanied by"
- Adjusted – although I think this may contradict what you said directly above.
- "looks in the video were reminiscent of" → "looks in the video were described as reminiscent of"
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- "according to critics" remove it due to the new wording above
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- ""You Make It Feel Like Christmas" has been performed on" → "The song has been performed for"
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- "and on the 2017" → "as well as on the 2017"
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Background and release
[edit]- [1][2] should both be solely at the end of the sentence
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- "she announced in July 2017 that she had plans to release new music by the end of the year" → "she announced her plans to release new music by the end of 2017 in July of that year" to avoid too much "she" uses
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- "began work on what would later become" → "began work on a track that later became"
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- Remove wikilink on You Make It Feel Like Christmas
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- "summer months of 2017 after Stefani" → "summer months of 2017, after Stefani"
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- "scheduled studio and songwriting sessions with Justin Tranter and Busbee" → "scheduled joint studio and songwriting sessions with Justin Tranter and busbee"
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- "The latter artist teamed up with Stefani" → "The latter of the three collaborated with Stefani"
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- "Busbee pushed Stefani to create a holiday album" → "Stefani was pressured to create a holiday album by busbee"
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- "Stefani listened to her favorite holiday albums from her" → "Stefani listened to the favorite holiday albums of her"
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- The EW citation should be evoked at the end of the sentence
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- "the titles of several unreleased tracks, such as" → "the titles of several unreleased tracks from Stefani, including"
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- Target music databases to List of online music databases
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- "Because of their titles" → "Because of the titles"
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- Target music critics to Music journalism
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- "may be recording a" → "may have been recording a"
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- Remove target on holiday album
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- "On September 18, 2017, the singer" → "On September 18 that year, the singer"
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- "for the holidays" and would release more" → "for the holidays", and would release more"
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- "she revealed that she had recorded" → "Stefani revealed that she had recorded"
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- "confirmed the project's title as You Make It Feel Like Christmas, and stated that its" → "confirming its title as You Make It Feel Like Christmas and stating that the"
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- Add wikilink on lead single
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- "It was sent to music distributors" → ""You Make It Feel Like Christmas" was sent to music distributors"
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- No citation for iTunes?
- Adjusted – I removed iTunes altogether as the source I planned to use is now dead.
- Mention that the release was through Interscope Records on the first sentence
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- "It was eventually serviced" → "It was ultimately serviced"
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- No citation(s) for the US/other releases that aren't Italy?
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- Mention that the non-Italy releases were through "the aforementioned label" and the Italy one was through Universal Music Group
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- Remove wikilink on lead single
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- Target promotional to Promotional recording
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- "handled by" → "serviced through"
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- Remove wikilink on Universal Music Group
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- "In a seasonal promotional campaign for the" → "For a seasonal promotional campaign of the"
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Composition and lyrics
[edit]- Img looks good
- Sounds good
- Wikilink upbeat to itself
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- Remove target on Christmas song
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- "described the single as a blend" → "described the song as a blend"
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- "incorporating both the" → "incorporating elements from both the"
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- "rather than the latter" → "more than the latter"
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- "Agreeing that the song has" → "Echoing the view that the song has"
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- Noisey should be wikilinked to itself and not italicised
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- Target Yuletide to Yule
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- "as headed into" → "as heading into"
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- Remove target on beats per minute
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- "it advances in the chord progressions" → "the vocal range advances in the chord progressions"
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- "The song was produced by Busbee" → "The song was produced by busbee" and this sentence with the following ones of this para belongs in the first section
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- Target engineered to Audio engineer
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- Target mixed to Audio mixing (recorded music)
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- "by Valentine" → "by the latter"
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- "whereas Busbee and Dave Way served as" → "whereas busbee and Dave Way were"
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- "engineers with assistance from" → "engineers, with assistance from"
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- "for the track with arrangements" → "for the track, with arrangements"
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- "The first verse belongs to Shelton" → "The first verse is performed by Shelton"
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- "who sings "I wanna" → "who sings, "I wanna"
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- "how she thought she "was" → "how she thought she 'was"
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- "love had died";" → "love had died'";"
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- Wikilink Christmas to itself in the sentence that follows the above
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- "The couple discusses love and name-drops" → "The couple discuss on love and name-drop"
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- Wikilink gingerbread to itself
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Critical reception
[edit]- "Regarding Shelton's featured role" → "Regarding Shelton's feature"
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- "Los Angeles Times's Randy Lewis enjoyed" → "Randy Lewis of the Los Angeles Times enjoyed"
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- "and found it to be an obvious inclusion on Stefani's album due to their" → "and an obvious inclusion on You Make It Feel Like Christmas due to the"
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- "an editor for the United Kingdom's Official Charts Company" → "an editor for the Official Charts Company"
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- Wikilink schmaltz to itself
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- "was equally positive" → "was similarly positive" since this is more neutral
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- "suggesting that Stefani and Shelton's track" → "suggesting that it"
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- "classic 'All I Want For Christmas Is You'"." → "classic 'All I Want For Christmas Is You'" from 1994"
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- "Noisey's Ross was critical of the single's" → "Ross was critical of the single's"
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- "in his 2017 article" → "for his 2017 article"
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- "however, he used their duet as" → "however, he used "You Make It Feel Like Christmas" as"
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- "was positive about the parent album as a whole" → "was positive about the album in general"
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- "he considered "You Make It Feel Like Christmas" to" → "he considered the song to"
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Commercial performance
[edit]- This section belongs inbetween Music video and Live performances instead
- Is this necessary? Plenty of Good Articles exist with this current layout of headings (Used to Love You, Hung Up, Don't Start Now, etc.)
- This is the layout that I have been informed is correct, since the chart performance should be closer to the table I believe? So, yes probably. --Kyle Peake (talk) 09:38, 21 June 2020 (UTC)
- From my experience, I have never written an article with that type of layout before. This is also the first I have heard of this during a GAN review. Unless you think this is completely mandatory, I would prefer to leave the layout as it stands.
- This is the layout that I have been informed is correct, since the chart performance should be closer to the table I believe? So, yes probably. --Kyle Peake (talk) 09:38, 21 June 2020 (UTC)
- Img needs alt text
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- "from holding the" → "from holding the US" on the main text
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- "In the United States" → "In the US" since you already said United States earlier in the body
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- "narrowly missed from entering the" → "narrowly missed entering the"
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- "Instead, it reached the" → "Instead, it reached the US"
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- "that have not yet charted" → "that are not currently charting" since former top 100 tracks can chart on it
- Actually, former Hot 100 tracks cannot enter the Bubbling Under chart.
- "The single entered at number 11 during the week ending December 23, 2018." → "The song entered the chart at number 11 for the issue date of December 23, 2017."
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- Citation is needed at the end of this sentence for the debut week
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- "The following week it peaked at number 2, blocked" → "The following week, it peaked at number two and was blocked"
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- Again, add citation at the end of the sentence
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- "It spent a total of four weeks on the Bubbling Under Hot 100 chart." → "The song lasted for four weeks on the Bubbling Under Hot 100."
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- "peaked at number 37 on the" → "peaked at number 37 on the US"
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- "Of Stefani's 5 top ten hits on the latter chart, "You Make It Feel Like Christmas"" → "Of Stefani's five top 10 hits on the latter chart, the song" per MOS:NUM
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- "the single reached number 9" → "the single reached number nine"
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- Add target to Adult Contemporary (chart) on only Adult Contemporary instead
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- "second top ten hit" → "second top 10 track"
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- "which peaked at number 3" → "peaked at number three"
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- "It also entered the seasonal" → "The former also entered the seasonal US"
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- Wikilink Holiday 100 to itself instead
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- "chart and peaked at number 37" → "chart, peaking at number 37"
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- "On Canada's charts" → "On Canadian charts"
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- "It also reached two airplay charts: the" → "It also reached other airplay charts for Canada: the"
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- "where the single peaked" → "where the song peaked"
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- "which once peaked at number 3" → "that had previously reached number three"
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- The following sentence is overkill on Commercial performance and feels not neutral for inclusion at all
- Removed
- "The following year during" → "The following year, during"
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- "due to heavy airplay rotation" are you sure is the correct phrasing for rotation?
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- "the song became Stefani's first entry" → "the song became Stefani's first chart entry"
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- "Her duet with Shelton entered" → "It entered"
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- "and peaked at number 62" → "and ultimately peaked at number 62"
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- "it spent two weeks total on the charts" → "the song spent two weeks in total on the Swiss Hitparade chart"
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- "A similar case occurred in Germany" → "Similar performance was attained in Germany"
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- "In the United Kingdom, the single" → "In the UK, the song"
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- You need a citation that verifies her chart history
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- "on December 22, 2017" → "for the chart dated December 22, 2017"
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- "it reached a peak of number 98" → "the former reached number 98"
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- [42][43] should both be solely at the end of the sentence
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- "it re-entered the Official Singles Chart, peaking" → "it re-entered the chart and peaked"
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- "on December 28, 2018" → "for the week ending December 28, 2018"
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- "By December 7, 2018," → "By December 7 of that year,"
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- "33,500 copies in the United Kingdom" → "33,500 copies in the UK"
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- "On the Scotland singles chart compiled" → "On the Scottish Singles Chart, compiled"
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- Remove wikilink on Official Charts Company
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- "within the airplay charts in" → "on the airplay charts for"
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- "Poland and Slovakia" → "Poland, and Slovakia"
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Music video
[edit]- Wiklink music video to itself
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- "was shot in one day" → "was shot over the course of one day"
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- "by Stefani's long-time collaborator" → "by long-time Stefani collaborator"
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- "inspiration for the video clip" → "inspiration for the clip"
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- "was the 1957 film" → "was the 1957 musical film" with the wikilink
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- "production wrapped and prior to the clip's" → "production was completed and prior to the video's"
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- "Shelton tweeted that video's style" → "Shelton tweeted that the style of the latter"
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- "citing Shelton's dislike" → "citing his dislike"
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- "Stefani first hinted about" → "Stefani first hinted of"
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- "November 18, 2018. She uploaded" → "November 18, 2018, uploading"
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- "One of the photos in particular" → "In particular, one of the photos"
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- "As mentioned, it" → "On the scheduled date, it"
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- Citation(s) at the end of the sentence should support a Vevo as well as YouTube upload
- Adjusted – Since the original Vevo link redirects to YouTube, I adjusted the sentence accordingly.
- Img needs alt text
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- Target music critics to Music journalism on the main text
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- "during a snowfall" → "as snow falls"
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- Add wikilink at the given point of orchestral
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- "setting with a backing band" → "setting, with a big backing band"
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- "much to the surprise of Shelton" → "and the people cause the surprise of Shelton"
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- "and Stefani wears a silver" → "and Stefani sports a silver"
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- [59][60] should both be solely at the end of the sentence
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- "with her look in this segment" → "with her look in the segment"
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- "compared to Marilyn Monroe" → "compared to American actress Marilyn Monroe"
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- "shows the duo" → "shows the couple"
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- "with Shelton's resembling the traditional variety and Stefani's replicating" → "with those built by Stefani replicating"
- I'm afraid this would not be a correct wording of the scene. In the video, Shelton builds one snowman and Stefani also builds one snowman. His looks like a traditional snowman while hers looks like Michelangelo.
- "The couple are again joined by the big band" → "They are again joined by the backing band"
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- "dancing children who perform their choreography" → "dancing children, who perform their choreography"
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- "as they sing" → "as the couple sing"
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- "shows Stefani adding the finishing touches" → "demonstrates Stefani adding the finishing touches"
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- "After the video fades to black" → "Following the video fading to black"
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- "Shelton losing control" → "the latter losing control"
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- "Alongside the release of the formal video" → "Alongside the release of the music video"
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- "was available for purchase" → "was made available for purchase via iTunes"
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- "of the music video was published onto" → "of the video was published to"
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- Remove target on Idolator
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- "impressed by the video" → "impressed by the visual
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- "Many critics considered Stefani" → "Multiple critics considered Stefani"
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- "channeling actress Marilyn Monroe" → "channeling Monroe"
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Live performances
[edit]- Adjusted
- "performed the title track" → "performed "You Make It Feel Like Christmas""
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- "She wore a festive sheer" → "The former wore a festive sheer"
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- "dress and ended the performance" → "dress, and ended the performance"
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- "from the parent album as part of the set list" → "from the album as part of her set list"
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- "for the portion and" → "when performing the track and"
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- "claimed that Stefani's" → "opined that Stefani's" per WP:CLAIM
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- Wikilink ska to itself
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- "both "You Make It Feel Like Christmas" and a" → "both "You Make It Feel Like Christmas", and a"
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- "For her appearance," → "For the former's appearance,"
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- "group of four backup dancers dressed" → "group of four backup dancers, dressed"
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- Target black-and-white to Black and white
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- "She also appeared on the December 19th" → "She also appeared on the December 19, 2018"
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- "This performance was praised" → "The performance was praised"
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- "who wrote: "Stefani brought" → "who wrote that "Stefani brought"
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- "performed a condensed version of the single" → "performed a condensed version of the song"
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- "It was broadcast in" → "It was broadcasted in"
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- Remove wikilink on black and white
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- "on the same day" → "that same day"
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- "The performance occurred on November 14, 2019 and Stefani" → "Her performance occurred on November 14, 2019, and Stefani""
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- "As described by Billboard," → "According to Heran Mamo of Billboard,"
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- "and eventually broadcast on" → "and later broadcast via"
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- "on December 4 of the same year" → "on December 4, 2019"
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- "reported that her performance" → "reported that the performance"
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Track listing
[edit]- Length should be 2:36, since that's what the ref says
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Credits and personnel
[edit]- Rewrite per this
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- Remove any capitalisation for bubee
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Charts
[edit]- See MOS:TABLECAPTION
- Wikilink Holiday 100 to itself instead
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Sales and certifications
[edit]- Remove as its totally unnecessary, since there are no certifications and 66,000 sales is far from the 200,000 eligible for a UK certification anyway
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References
[edit]- Copyvio score looks fine; is really high for one URL but that one isn't even included in this article so it's fine
- Okay
- Make sure that all of these are archived using the tool
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- Remove target on Billboard for refs 7 and 34
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- Ref 8 should cite Amazon Music as publisher instead with target to Amazon (company), while remove "on Amazon Music" from the title
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- Target Interscope to Interscope Records on ref 10
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- Wikilink Taste of Country to itself instead on ref 13
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- Remove wikilink to Entertainment Weekly on ref 15
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- Copsey is misspelled on ref 16 and the date is incorrect
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- Cite Noisey as publisher instead for ref 19 and wikilink to itself
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- Wikilink Rolling Stone to itself on ref 24
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- Remove the work/website from ref 37 and cite BDSRadio as publisher instead
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- Ref 44 is a duplicate of ref 16
- Not anymore. The archival tool messed this up when I used it however long ago.
- Wikilink YouTube to itself on ref 49 and remove (US)
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- MOS:QWQ issues with ref 52
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- Remove wikilink to YouTube on ref 57 and remove (US)
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- Target Today to Today (American TV program) on ref 59
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- Remove target on Idolator for ref 64
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- Wikilink One Country to itself on ref 69
- That is not the same publication.
- Remove (US) from the publisher for refs 70 and 72
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- Remove target on Interscope for ref 77
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- Change refs 79 and 80 to citing HRT solely for the publisher, with the target only for the former
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External links
[edit]- Remove the music video from here
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- (behind-the scenes) → (Behind The Scenes)
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Final comments and verdict
[edit]On hold for a week, until you fix the issues. --Kyle Peake (talk) 10:16, 13 June 2020 (UTC)
- Carbrera Has been five days already and no response, could you not delay this any further as I would hate to fail the article due to your inactivity at WP? --Kyle Peake (talk) 09:09, 18 June 2020 (UTC)
- Kyle Peake – thanks for your patience. I believe all of your comments have been addressed, in addition to several comments above. Let me know if there is anything else I can do. Carbrera (talk) 22:30, 21 June 2020 (UTC).
- Carbrera Thanks a lot for this, I did some brief copy editing and fixed the chart table caption; take a look so you know what to do in the future. --Kyle Peake (talk) 06:41, 22 June 2020 (UTC)