Talk:Zavier Simpson/GA1
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 07:58, 14 April 2018 (UTC)
Reviewing this as part of a GA sweep. Comments will appear soon. MWright96 (talk) 07:58, 14 April 2018 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section):
b (citations to reliable sources):
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- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects):
b (focused):
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
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- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
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Lead
[edit]- Try and start every other sentence in the lead with "Simpson" instead of "he"
- Fixed.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:21, 17 April 2018 (UTC)
Early life
[edit]- "he worked out for between 1 and a half and two hours" - one
- O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 16:35, 17 April 2018 (UTC)
- "On December 15 Simpson broke two-time Ohio Mr. Basketball Greg" - a comma is needed between "15" and "Simpson
- O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 16:37, 17 April 2018 (UTC)
- "On February 2 Simpson posted 65 points against Fremont Ross." - same as above
- O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 16:37, 17 April 2018 (UTC)
- "On September 9, 2015, 'Xavier Simpson committed to Michigan." - Simpson committed to playing college basketball for Michigan.
- Thx.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 16:39, 17 April 2018 (UTC)
- "Simpson earned the 2015 Ohio Associated Press Division I Player of the Year as a junior and the 2014 Ohio Division III state championship as a sophomore" - These two awards needed to be swapped so the are in chronological order
- Fixed.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 16:42, 17 April 2018 (UTC)
- Scout.com, Rivals.com and 247Sports.com need to be wikilinked
- O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 16:44, 17 April 2018 (UTC)
- "were all named to the 2015–16 Associated Press Ohio high school Division I boys basketball all-state 1st team." - 2015-16 Associated Press Ohio High School Division I Boys Basketball All-State 1st Team.
- O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 16:47, 17 April 2018 (UTC)
Sophomore season
[edit]- "Simpson posted his career high 16 points in contest against top 5 rated opponents" - rewrite to Simpson posted a career-high 16 points it contest against his top 5 rated opponents.
- I think you may have posted some sort of typo because it seems better to me as it is.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 16:56, 17 April 2018 (UTC)
- Okay MWright96 (talk) 18:30, 18 April 2018 (UTC)
- Wikilink AP Poll and Coaches Poll the first time both are mentioned
- O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 16:59, 17 April 2018 (UTC)
- Link steal, rebound and assist too Steal (basketball), Rebound (basketball) and Assist (basketball, respectively for those unfamiliar ith basketball
- Done.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:03, 17 April 2018 (UTC)
- "Although Simpson averaged only 7.3 points per game for the season," - I believe just would be better than "only"
- O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:06, 17 April 2018 (UTC)
- "as the game was the championship game of the 2018 Big Ten Conference Men's Basketball Tournament." - reword this sentence so it reads as as they contested the championship game of the 2018 Big Ten Conference Men's Basketball Tournament
- I have clarified the statement, which must have been confusing.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:09, 17 April 2018 (UTC)
References
[edit]- References 25, 27, 29 & 34 are lacking the author
- added.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:19, 17 April 2018 (UTC)
Going to be putting the review on hold for the time being so that the nominator can look at the queries raised above. MWright96 (talk) 17:28, 14 April 2018 (UTC)
- Right then, going to promote to GA. MWright96 (talk) 18:30, 18 April 2018 (UTC)