Template:Did you know nominations/Betsy Head Park

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The result was: promoted by Gatoclass (talk) 15:39, 24 October 2019 (UTC)

Betsy Head Park

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• ... that Brooklyn's Betsy Head Park was designed to be "one of the finest in the world", with such facilities as a swimming pool and a stadium with a running track? Source: Stevenson, Frederick Boyd (August 10, 1913). "Brownsville Leads Way for Playgrounds". Brooklyn Daily Eagle.
  • ALT1:... that the design for Betsy Head Park received first prize in the New York City parks portion of the Panama–Pacific International Exposition? Source: NYC Parks
  • ALT2:... that the namesake of Betsy Head Park donated half her estate to the New York City parks system, and only $5 to her daughter? Source: NYCLPC, p. 15

• Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/England's difficulty is Ireland's opportunity
• Comment: Some content was copied from Brownsville, Brooklyn and was written by me three years ago. The current article is a 5x expansion from this split content.

Created by Epicgenius (talk). Self-nominated at 22:36, 14 October 2019 (UTC).

Substantial article, meticulously sourced, no copyvio obvious. A picture would be good, but I understand that they are all rather pale. I think that the quirky ALT2 might attract most viewers. Striking ALT1 as too much on the specifics of the prize. In hook and article, do we need "her own daughter" vs. "her daughter"? I find the wording "There have been several incidents over the years where people have drowned." a bit cold, - imagine you read that, and your daughter was one of those who drowned, - try something else? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 08:08, 15 October 2019 (UTC)

@Gerda Arendt: Thanks for the review. I don't know what wording would work best for describing these drowning incidents, but tried to reword it anyway. I revised ALT2 to remove the redundant word "own". epicgenius (talk) 12:55, 15 October 2019 (UTC)

ALT2 preferred, - thank you! Just amazing how you produce one of these exceptional articles after the other! --Gerda Arendt (talk) 14:11, 15 October 2019 (UTC)