Template:Did you know nominations/Brett Toth

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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:06, 9 October 2019 (UTC)

Brett Toth

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... that Arizona Cardinals offensive tackle Brett Toth was the first Army Black Knights football player to play in the Senior Bowl? Source: "Brett Toth is first player from West Point to ever play in Senior Bowl"

Reviewed: Reviewing Template:Did you know nominations/Suli Lake-2nd of 3 QPQs.

Created by TonyTheTiger (talk). Self-nominated at 12:52, 8 September 2019 (UTC).

The article is new enough and long enough, but the hook fact isn't explicitly included in the article. The article states, "became the first person to represent West Point at the Senior Bowl", rather than the first Army Black Knights football player. I can't access the source (US news sites don't like the EU's GDPR) to confirm what is said there. With a small tweak to either the hook or the article though, this would be good to go. Harrias ^talk 08:43, 10 September 2019 (UTC)

@Harrias: Uninvolved editor from the US here: those are basically the same thing in this context, since "West Point" is often used to refer to Army. Raymie (t • c) 19:37, 15 September 2019 (UTC)

@TonyTheTiger and Raymie: I am aware and comfortable with the West Point/army conflation, but it is specifically the claim that he was a Army Black Knights football player that is missing. Harrias ^talk 19:40, 15 September 2019 (UTC)

@Harrias: I added this as a source into the article. It states, "West Ashley High School product Brett Toth, a graduate of the United States Military Academy, received a waiver from the U.S. Army so that he can immediately begin his NFL career. ... Toth was the first Army player to play in the Senior Bowl after the 2018 season." Hopefully that resolves any lingering confusion. Raymie (t • c) 19:45, 15 September 2019 (UTC)

thx.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 02:55, 17 September 2019 (UTC)

@TonyTheTiger and Raymie: I'm happy with the source, but the article itself still only states "became the first person to represent West Point at the Senior Bowl", rather than the first Army Black Knights football player. Harrias ^talk 07:31, 26 September 2019 (UTC)

@Harrias: I made a minor revision to bring the text closer in line, even though I don't think it quite that necessary. Raymie (t • c) 08:01, 26 September 2019 (UTC)

Thanks, with that change, this is good to go. Harrias ^talk 08:03, 26 September 2019 (UTC)

The QPQ is not complete, so this cannot be promoted until the review is done. BlueMoonset (talk) 01:43, 1 October 2019 (UTC)

QPQ has been completed; restoring Harrias's tick from 26 September. BlueMoonset (talk) 05:55, 8 October 2019 (UTC)