Template:Did you know nominations/Chardon High School shooting

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The following discussion is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:44, 8 March 2012 (UTC)

Chardon High School shooting[edit]

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  • ...<s>that [[Chardon High School]] teacher Joseph Ricci had a bulletproof vest in his classroom that he wore during the '''[[Chardon High School shooting]]'''?</s>

Created/expanded by Ishtar456 (talk). Self nom at 23:53, 28 February 2012 (UTC)

  • ALT 1... a student witness to the Chardon High School shooting said her Math teacher, Joseph Ricci, had a bulletproof vest in his classroom that he wore during the crisis?
I think this alternative more accurately describes what was said.--Ishtar456 (talk) 19:13, 2 March 2012 (UTC)
  • ALT 2... <s>that hundreds of [[Facebook]] users joined a counter-protested when the [[Westboro Baptist Church|WBC]] announced they would protest the funeral of one of the '''[[Chardon High School shooting]]''' victims?</s> --Ishtar456

(talk) 13:06, 3 March 2012 (UTC)

reviewed Woodford, Wiltshire --Ishtar456 (talk) 01:45, 29 February 2012 (UTC)
reviewed St Margaret's Church
reviewed Great Wheal Fortune
reviewed Isinglass (horse)
reviewed Charles Cruft (showman)--Ishtar456 (talk) 23:19, 1 March 2012 (UTC)
  • Actually I have reviewed dozen of noms. I hope this one gets looked at. I am favoring either ALT 1 or Alt 3. Looking forward to the discussion.--Ishtar456 (talk) 10:54, 5 March 2012 (UTC)
  • It's a sad statement about the state of education in America when a math teacher finds it necessary to have a bulletproof vest in his classroom. I prefer ALT1, but ALT3 and 4 check out.
Hook: All cited, all short enough. Prefer ALT1
Article: New enough, long enough. Well referenced. I think direct quotes are used a bit too heavily; we should preferably cut back on the number of quotes by paraphrasing them. Checks with the duplication detector (1, 2, 3) look okay.
Summary: I'd rather we cut back on the number of direct quotes, Crisco 1492 (talk) 06:43, 6 March 2012 (UTC)
I cut out three quotes in the fatalities section. I do not think that the entire quote from the facebook page should be there, but that was someone else's contribution and I didn't want to be too picky. For what it is worth, it does not count as part of the prose. I really tried to quote only where I felt I needed to be as accurate as possible, avoiding BLP issues. I will work on this more after work. Thanks for looking at this.--Ishtar456 (talk) 11:26, 6 March 2012 (UTC)
  • I love the tweaking that you did. I tweaked some of the tweaks (especially the last paragraph) for accuracy. I want to thank you very much for your efforts. I think it is greatly improved. I took out the long facebook quote (because I am not sure it is relevant) and opened a discussion on the talk page. Let me know if there is anything else I can do.--Ishtar456 (talk) 21:32, 6 March 2012 (UTC)
  • I struck out the two rejected hooks. I think either of the two that are left are important. Your pick.--Ishtar456 (talk) 21:38, 6 March 2012 (UTC)
  • Good to go with ALT1 or ALT3; up to the promoter which seems better. Crisco 1492 (talk) 22:58, 6 March 2012 (UTC)
Note to Promoter: This has already been viewed over 70,000 times and has had a lot of IP edits. One tonight was an expression of sympathy for the victims right in the middle of the article. I can keep up with them now, but, could it be semi-protected while on the main page? Thanks.--Ishtar456 (talk) 02:46, 7 March 2012 (UTC)
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