Template:Did you know nominations/Charles Spencer Francis
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- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:04, 11 April 2020 (UTC)
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Charles Spencer Francis
- ... that Charles Spencer Francis (pictured) served in the same diplomatic roles as his father, John M. Francis, did? Source: "His father, John M. Francis, was also at one time Ambassador to Austria-Hungary [...] in 1870 ... his father, then United States Minister to Greece. He [the son] was appointed Minister to Greece [...] in 1900 ..." [1]
- ALT1:... that Charles Spencer Francis (pictured) followed the footsteps of his father, John M. Francis, in both journalism and diplomacy? Source: [2]
- Reviewed: Review not necessary — less than 5 DYKs.
Created by Javert2113 (talk). Self-nominated at 03:07, 9 March 2020 (UTC).
- I would suggest that more context about Francis be added to the hooks: it is not really unusual or even uncommon that children of diplomats would go on to become diplomats themselves. I would advise proposing hooks that focus specifically on Francis's diplomatic career, independent of his father. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 13:11, 15 March 2020 (UTC)
- Hmm, perhaps ALT2: ... that Charles Spencer Francis, a U.S. diplomat, set the world record for intercollegiate single-scull rowing while at Cornell University? Something like that, perhaps? — Javert2113 (Siarad.|¤) 17:24, 15 March 2020 (UTC)
- That actually sounds much better and more unusual, although there's something that needs to be clarified: was it the world record in general, or only for intercollegiate sports? I've also linked to single scull as I don't think it's a term that general audiences would be familiar with. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 00:10, 16 March 2020 (UTC)
- Hmm, just intercollegiate, per his NYT obituary. Blast, sorry that this DYK is such a pickle, Narutolovehinata5. — Javert2113 (Siarad.|¤) 02:31, 16 March 2020 (UTC)
- I think it's still okay even if it was simply intercollegiate, ALT2 will just need to be revised accordingly. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 03:11, 16 March 2020 (UTC)
- Okay. Made the change. (Appreciate the formatting fix, Mandarax!) — Javert2113 (Siarad.|¤) 12:54, 16 March 2020 (UTC)
- That sounds good. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 04:01, 17 March 2020 (UTC)
- Okay. Made the change. (Appreciate the formatting fix, Mandarax!) — Javert2113 (Siarad.|¤) 12:54, 16 March 2020 (UTC)
- I think it's still okay even if it was simply intercollegiate, ALT2 will just need to be revised accordingly. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 03:11, 16 March 2020 (UTC)
- Hmm, just intercollegiate, per his NYT obituary. Blast, sorry that this DYK is such a pickle, Narutolovehinata5. — Javert2113 (Siarad.|¤) 02:31, 16 March 2020 (UTC)
- That actually sounds much better and more unusual, although there's something that needs to be clarified: was it the world record in general, or only for intercollegiate sports? I've also linked to single scull as I don't think it's a term that general audiences would be familiar with. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 00:10, 16 March 2020 (UTC)
Wonderful. Thank you so much! — Javert2113 (Siarad.|¤) 12:49, 17 March 2020 (UTC)
- Article is new enough, long enough, adequately sourced. Unable to check for close paraphrasing due to technical issues with Earwigs, but I am assuming good faith for the sources provided. ALT2 is the best option; AGF on sourcing as the NYT source is paywalled on my end. No QPQ needed. The article wording could need some brushing up: the phrase
The diplomatic life was not done with him yet
does not sound formal or encyclopedic and may need to be rephrased. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 01:08, 20 March 2020 (UTC)- All right, I'll make it sound stiff. (I kid.) — Javert2113 (Siarad.|¤) 12:15, 23 March 2020 (UTC)
- @Javert2113: Thanks, I think the article looks a lot better now. I could suggest that ALT2 be slightly rephrased to emphasize that his record was set when he was still a student, like perhaps mentioning "while at Cornell University" before "diplomat" or making it clear that he wasn't a diplomat yet at the time but became one later. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 09:38, 25 March 2020 (UTC)
- All right. Made the change — ALT2: "... that U.S. diplomat Charles Spencer Francis, while a student at Cornell University, set the world record for intercollegiate single-scull rowing". Thank you for your help, again! — Javert2113 (Siarad.|¤) 11:37, 25 March 2020 (UTC)
- Thanks, that sounds better. However, it could probably still be revised further since it can be easy to misinterpret the hook as meaning that he was already a diplomat while a student. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 12:13, 25 March 2020 (UTC)
- ALT2: "... that Cornell University student Charles Spencer Francis, later the United States Ambassador to Austria, set the world record for intercollegiate single-scull rowing"? — Javert2113 (Siarad.|¤) 20:34, 27 March 2020 (UTC)
- Almost there, just needs to specify the year to make it clear that this isn't a recent record. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 09:08, 28 March 2020 (UTC)
- ALT2: "... that Cornell University student Charles Spencer Francis, later the United States Ambassador to Austria, set the world record for intercollegiate single-scull rowing"? — Javert2113 (Siarad.|¤) 20:34, 27 March 2020 (UTC)
- Thanks, that sounds better. However, it could probably still be revised further since it can be easy to misinterpret the hook as meaning that he was already a diplomat while a student. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 12:13, 25 March 2020 (UTC)
- All right. Made the change — ALT2: "... that U.S. diplomat Charles Spencer Francis, while a student at Cornell University, set the world record for intercollegiate single-scull rowing". Thank you for your help, again! — Javert2113 (Siarad.|¤) 11:37, 25 March 2020 (UTC)
- @Javert2113: Thanks, I think the article looks a lot better now. I could suggest that ALT2 be slightly rephrased to emphasize that his record was set when he was still a student, like perhaps mentioning "while at Cornell University" before "diplomat" or making it clear that he wasn't a diplomat yet at the time but became one later. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 09:38, 25 March 2020 (UTC)
Okay. So: ALT2: "... that, in 1876, Cornell University student Charles Spencer Francis, later the United States Ambassador to Austria, set the world record for intercollegiate single-scull rowing"? — Javert2113 (Siarad.|¤) 17:12, 31 March 2020 (UTC)
- The wording is still a little awkward but I think that can be worked on in prep. Otherwise I think we can be good to go with ALT2. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 04:18, 3 April 2020 (UTC)