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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:35, 11 May 2017 (UTC)

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Deval Devi[edit]

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  • ... that Deval Devi's second and third husbands were responsible for the deaths of her first and second husbands respectively? Source: Houtsma, M. Th. (1993). E. J. Brill's First Encyclopaedia of Islam, 1913-1936. BRILL. p. 1168. ISBN 90-04-09790-2. & Mahajan, V. D. (2015). "The Khalji Dynasty (1290-1320 A.D.)". History of Medieval India. New Delhi: Sultan Chand. ISBN 978-81-219-0364-6.)

Moved to mainspace by Skr15081997 (talk). Self-nominated at 09:20, 15 April 2017 (UTC).

  • Article moved to namespace recently enough, long enough at 2.4k readable prose, well cited. Neutrality and copyvio detector checks out. I find the first hook very interesting, and it is supported by the brill source, which is verifiable online. However, before exposure on the main page I believe this article needs to be improved for verification.
  1. Please explain/link non-obvious terms such as "Rajput", "masnavi", "Sultanate" (which sultanate is it talking about?)
  2. Don't just drop new names such as "Khizr", "During Mubarak's reign", etc. without explaining who they are and how they relate to the previous prose. You need to re-introduce them in body even if you already did in lead.
  3. The hook depends on 5 key facts. She was married to (1) Khizr, (2) Mubarak, (3) Khusro and (4) Mubarak killed Khizr, and (5) Khusro killed Mubarak. fact (3) isn't mentioned in the body, fact (4) isn't mentioned clearly. Please fix it.
Sorry for the long review :) It's an interesting article, once the issues above are addressed I think we're good to go. HaEr48 (talk) 03:52, 8 May 2017 (UTC)
  • HaEr48, thanks for your detailed review. I have made the necessary changes. --Skr15081997 (talk) 05:12, 8 May 2017 (UTC)
Good to go now. Thanks for the prompt response. HaEr48 (talk) 05:51, 8 May 2017 (UTC)
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