Template:Did you know nominations/Edison Portland Cement Company

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The result was: promoted by Allen3 ^talk 21:24, 5 October 2011 (UTC)

Edison Portland Cement Company

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• ... that Thomas Edison wanted to make furniture, refrigerators, and pianos out of concrete but instead made the Yankee Stadium?
  

ALT1: ... that Thomas Edison wanted to make furniture, refrigerators, and pianos out of concrete but instead used it to make the Yankee Stadium?
ALT2: ... that Thomas Edison hoped to make furniture, refrigerators, and pianos using the concrete he developed but it was instead used to make the Yankee Stadium?

• Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/John Collee

Created/expanded by Violetriga (talk). Self nom at 19:27, 24 September 2011 (UTC)

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• An interesting piece. I'd leave Yankee Stadium out of the hook entirely:

• ALT3 ... that Thomas Edison started a concrete business with a vision of making houses, furniture, refrigerators, and pianos from concrete? --Orlady (talk) 15:33, 26 September 2011 (UTC)

I agree - what about the snappier:

• ALT4 ... that Thomas Edison proposed making pianos out of concrete?
   —SMALLJIM  12:59, 29 September 2011 (UTC)

I understand the point that you both make. I wrote the original hook to have a kind of unexpected edge to it: Edison failing to make small items of furniture but managing to (help) construct a famous Stadium visited by millions. It also benefits from having a nice image to go with it. violet/riga _^[talk] 21:22, 29 September 2011 (UTC)

for ALT2, like "hope" and "developed" there. Date, length, referencing fine, no obvious copyvio/pl, like the the (free) pic, --Gerda Arendt (talk) 14:50, 4 October 2011 (UTC)

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