Template:Did you know nominations/George H. W. Bush 1992 presidential campaign

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The result was: promoted by Kingsif (talk) 18:20, 10 May 2021 (UTC)

George H. W. Bush 1992 presidential campaign

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President Bush waves from the train outside of Bowling Green during his whistle-stop campaign.

... that during George H. W. Bush's 1992 presidential campaign, he conducted a whistle stop tour (pictured) on a train named "Spirit of America"? Source:Toledo Blade, Associate Press

Created by Kavyansh.Singh (talk). Self-nominated at 13:33, 29 April 2021 (UTC).

I have to say, I am surprised this never existed until now! Date, length (very well done, FA nom incoming I predict?) and hook all OK. QPQ not needed as this is his first nomination. No close paraphrasing (beyond a few quotes). Picture is licenced fine. Good to go. The C of E God Save the Queen! (talk) 14:08, 29 April 2021 (UTC)

Yes, but it needs a little rephrasing. You cannot campaign IN whistle stop train tour; also there's no need to repeat 'train' twice. I suggest the following: ...he conducted a whistle stop tour on a train named "Spirit of America" That's also how I've tweaked it in the article's lead. Good luck! Leoseliv (talk) 22:23, 6 May 2021 (UTC)

@Leoseliv: and @The C of E: Sure, I have rephrased the hook as per your suggestions.