Template:Did you know nominations/Gui Minhai
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The result was: rejected by —♦♦ AMBER(ЯʘCK) 09:20, 3 April 2016 (UTC)
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Gui Minhai
[edit]- ... that a Swedish national who disappeared from his holiday home in Thailand appeared exactly three months later in a confessional video broadcast by China Central Television?
- ALT1:... that two Swedish citizens, Gui Minhai and Peter Dahlin, appeared in video confessions broadcast by China Central Television within two days of each other in January 2016.
- Reviewed: Lütfi Elvan (second of eight credits used)
Created/expanded by Ohconfucius (talk). Self-nominated at 00:05, 15 February 2016 (UTC).
This article seems to check out on nearly all fronts, but one concern remains: its English needs to be reworked. Please see to it that this article receives a copyedit.—♦♦ AMBER(ЯʘCK) 12:39, 8 March 2016 (UTC)
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Unfortunately, it's not good enough. Many instances of awkward phrasing still exist, and in some cases I'm not even sure what you are trying to say. I've highlighted some of them here:
- "He joined a local affiliate of 2003 Nordpool Consulting of Germany as a consultant"
- "Gui returned to Ningbo from Sweden, started a company offering environmental engineering services, serving as director and general manager."
- "two years' imprisonment, suspended for two years."
- "17 January 2016, Xinhua News Agency published an article"
- "had committed traffic crime"
- "involve knowingly distributing under false cover books"
- This article will require more work.—♦♦ AMBER(ЯʘCK) 14:45, 10 March 2016 (UTC)
@Ohconfucius: I see you have made some changes to the article. Is this ready for a rereview yet? —♦♦ AMBER(ЯʘCK) 18:48, 15 March 2016 (UTC)
I was just looking for something to review and so came to this as the oldest pending topic. I read through the article and then compared it with an external source in English: Gui Minhai: the strange disappearance of a publisher who riled China's elite. I notice that the Guardian reports some discreditable facts about the subject which do not seem to appear in the article – "His salacious and, many suspect, largely fabricated tales focused on the private lives of senior party leaders."; '“He’s mainly a businessman. Publishing to him is a means of earning money rather than ideology,” he said. “In his books there is a lot of guessing also about political gossip rather than actual fact.” Gui had done well out of his almost decade-long career in publishing.'